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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child mmMN
Dear Sir or Madam, I am very excited after reading about your advertisement in Australian Magazine this week and would like to express my interest for the same. I am 27 years old Software developer named Disha Teli from Melbourne. I am currently working as a free lancer developer since last 2 years. Though I enjoy my current job of designing applications, I'm looking for a part time job that gives me joy and reduces my interaction with machines. I love spending time with kids. In fact, In my past time, I play with my friend's kids and they love me too. My friend's often ask me how do I be so friendly with kids and handle them with ease, especially the cranky ones and my reply is "just be patient". I'm sure your kid will love spending time with me too and I can assure you to take his/her good care. As I already mentioned about my free lancing job, I would like to continue with it in my free time and as it is free lancing, the job times are quite flexible so you need not worry about me handling multiple things. I can also help your kid with his/her homework as I was good at academics myself and love teaching others. I hope you will consider my application and understand my interest in this wonderful opportunity. Looking forward to hear from you. Regards, Disha Teli
Dear Sir or Madam, I am
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excited after reading about your advertisement in Australian Magazine this week and would like to express my interest for the same. I am 27 years
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Software developer named
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Disha
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Teli
from Melbourne. I am
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free lancer
developer since last 2 years. Though I enjoy my
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current
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job
of designing applications, I'm looking for a part
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time
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job
that gives me joy and
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reduces
my interaction with machines. I
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love
spending
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with
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kids
. In fact, In my past
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time
, I play with my friend's
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kids and
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love
me too. My friend's
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often
ask me how do I be
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so
friendly with
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kids
and handle them with
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ease
,
especially
the cranky ones and my reply is
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be patient
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. I'm sure your
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kid
will
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love
spending
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with me too and I can assure you to take his/her
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care. As I already
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mentioned about my
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free lancing
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job
, I would like to continue with it in my
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free
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time
and as it is
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free lancing
, the
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job
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times
are quite flexible
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you need not worry about me handling multiple things. I can
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your
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kid
with his/her homework as I was
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at academics myself and
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love
teaching others. I hope you will consider my application and understand my interest in this wonderful opportunity. Looking forward
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to hear
from you.

Regards,

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Disha
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Teli
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child

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  American English
3 paragraphs
237 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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