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You Have Seen An Advertisement For Someone To Stay With A Family To Take Care Of Their Child | Band 8 IELTS Letter Sample

You Have Seen An Advertisement For Someone To Stay With A Family To Take Care Of Their Child | Band 8 IELTS Letter Sample GGAB

Dear sir/madam, Recently i saw your advertisement in Australia magazine for baby sitting. I am writing this letter to express my interest in it. I would love to do nanny job as i like kids, Infact i have been doing it for my younger cousin sister as both my uncle and aunt were working and i took the responsibility of her. I am a calm and extrovert person and can easily get migle with childrens. Also i'm very well aligned with parents instructions related to kids sleep, food or fun timings and I do help kids with there homework too. I am IT students with bachelor degree, in my free time i would like do some freelancing which will help me in my future career. Looking forward to hear from you.

Dear sir/madam, Recently Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 your advertisement in Australia magazine for baby sitting. I am writing this letter to express my interest in it. I would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 to do nanny job as Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 like kids, Possible spelling mistake found.InfantIntactInfectInfarctIn factInf act
Infact
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 have been doing it for my younger cousin sister as both my uncle and aunt were working and Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 took the responsibility of her. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am a calm and extrovert person and can easily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
Possible spelling mistake found.milemingleSIGLE
migle
 with Possible spelling mistake found.children
childrens
. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
Did you mean "I'm"?I'm
i'm
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 well aligned with parents instructions related to kids sleep, food or fun timings and I do This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 kids with there homework too. I am IT students with bachelor degree, in my free time Did you mean "I"?I
i
 would like do This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 freelancing which will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 me in my future career. Looking forward In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".to hearing
to hear
 from you. 

IELTS letter You Have Seen An Advertisement For Someone To Stay With A Family To Take Care Of Their Child | Band 8 IELTS Letter Sample

Letter

American English

1 paragraphs

131 words

This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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