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You have rented a four-bedroom house, which you share with two other students. However, there are several problems with this house that need fixing. You also find it expensive and would like to find another student to share the spare bedroom. v.3

You have rented a four-bedroom house, which you share with two other students. However, there are several problems with this house that need fixing. You also find it expensive and would like to find another student to share the spare bedroom. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of your District Sign property, writing to notify you that the central heating system in our house is inadequate and our flat needs some renovation works. I am hoping that you would arrange to fix these issues urgently and let me take a new roommate to reduce the cost. I have been living in one of your houses for the last eight months. I have been sharing this house with two other students. However, we regret to say that the central heating system is ineffectual and this needs an immediate fix as the temperature is below 4 degrees now. Besides, minor dilapidation is visible in some parts of the house and the damp bathroom needs some professional works. I am not sure when was the last time the flat got an inspection from the safety bureau and you should do that promptly. Finally, the house needs a fresh touch of painting. I would like to inform that we have a spare bedroom that we would like to rent out to a student. The rent we share is a bit expensive. I hope you would not mind if we take an extra person to share the rent. Yours faithfully, Alfred Roan
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a resident of your District
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Sign
property, writing to notify you that the central heating system in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
is inadequate and our flat
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
renovation works. I am hoping that you would arrange to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
these issues
urgently
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me take a new roommate to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the cost.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have been living in one of your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
for the last eight months.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have been sharing this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
with two other students.
However
, we regret to say that the central heating system is ineffectual and this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
an immediate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
as the temperature is below 4 degrees
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.
Besides
, minor dilapidation is visible in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
parts of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
and the damp bathroom
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
professional works. I am not sure when was the last time the flat
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
an inspection from the safety bureau and you should do that
promptly
.
Finally
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
a fresh touch of painting.

I would like to inform that we have a spare bedroom that we would like to rent out to a student. The rent we share is a bit expensive. I hope you would not mind if we take an extra person to share the rent.

Yours
faithfully
,

Alfred Roan
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have rented a four-bedroom house, which you share with two other students. However, there are several problems with this house that need fixing. You also find it expensive and would like to find another student to share the spare bedroom. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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