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You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately, you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time. v.3

You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately, you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time. v. 3
Dear Miss Penny, On 15th February I borrowed three books from the school library and I am due to return the books on 22nd February. Unfortunately, I am travelling to New Jersey tomorrow morning to see my uncle who has been taken to a local hospital. Thus I would be unable to return the borrowed books in due time. I am hoping you would consider the late return of the book and do not impose any overdue fine on me. I borrowed these books using my library card - PA452147 on 22nd February and I am supposed to return those by 27th February. But, I regret to inform you that I would not be able to return them in time. My uncle, who is very close to me, fall ill last evening and was admitted to a hospital. I will travel to visit him earlier tomorrow. Regrettably, the library will remain closed tomorrow and my deadline to return the books is the day after tomorrow. Considering the current situation, I cannot return the borrowed book before 5th March as I might stay in New Jersey a couple of days. Therefore, I request you to extend the date of return by another week. I am hoping you would not impose any late fine on me. However, if this is not possible, I am willing to pay any fine for the late submission of borrowed books. I am hoping to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Ramanuj  Arjun
Dear Miss Penny,

On 15th February I
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borrowed
three
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books
from the school
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library and
I am due to
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return
the
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books
on 22nd February. Unfortunately, I am travelling to New Jersey tomorrow morning to
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see
my uncle who has
been taken
to a local hospital.
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Thus
I would be unable to
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return
the
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borrowed
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books
in due time. I am hoping you would consider the late
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return
of the
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book
and do not impose any overdue fine on me.

I
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borrowed
these
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books
using my library card
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-
PA452147 on 22nd
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February and
I
am supposed
to
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return
those by 27th February.
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But
, I regret to inform you that I would not be able to
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return
them in time. My uncle, who is
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very
close to me,
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fall
ill last evening and
was admitted
to a hospital. I will travel to visit him earlier tomorrow.
Regrettably
, the library will remain closed tomorrow and my deadline to
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return
the
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books
is the day after tomorrow.

Considering the
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current
situation, I cannot
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return
the
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borrowed
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book
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before
5th March as I might stay in New Jersey a couple of days.
Therefore
, I request you to extend the date of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
return
by another week. I am hoping you would not impose any late fine on me.
However
, if this is not possible, I am willing to pay any fine for the late submission of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
borrowed
books.

I am hoping to hear from you
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soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Ramanuj
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Arjun
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS letter You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately, you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time. v. 3

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  American English
7 paragraphs
245 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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