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You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like and say what experience and skills you have Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest to your employment agency as I am looking for a part-time job next summer. I have recently graduated from my university with the major of teaching Mathematics in English. I would like to do a part-time job relating to my major to gain some professional experience. One of my friends, Ms. Linda, who is teaching Physics in your school, has recommended this work. I have a good diploma in Mathematics, and my English is good enough to communicate with foreigners. I have been working as a teaching assistant for a Mathematics center for over 2 years, and I also have experience in teaching small groups of students. I am passionate about Mathematics and working with childrens, so I would like to work in an international school. I would probably like to work in evenings on weekdays, since I am working a full-time job in office hours. I hope you could kindly have a look at my CV, that I am sending with this letter. I sincerely appreciate your help and I am looking to hearing more detailed information from you soon. Yours faithfully.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my interest to your employment agency as I am looking for a part-time job
next
summer.

I have recently graduated from my university with the major of
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teaching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Mathematics
in English.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to do a part-time job relating to my major to gain
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some
professional experience. One of my friends, Ms. Linda, who is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
Physics in your school, has recommended this work. I have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
diploma in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Mathematics
, and my English is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to communicate with foreigners. I have been working as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
assistant for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Mathematics
center for over 2 years, and I
also
have experience in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
groups of students.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am passionate about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Mathematics
and working with
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childrens
,
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so
I would like to work in an international school.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would
probably
like to work in evenings on weekdays, since I am working a full-time job in office hours.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope you could kindly have a look at my CV, that I am sending with this letter.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
sincerely
appreciate your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
help and
I am looking to hearing more detailed information from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
.
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IELTS letter You are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like and say what experience and skills you have

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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