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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture.

Dear Sir/Madam I'am Cherry Mercado, I recently moved in Brooks flat. Brooks flat is empressively beatiful and the ambiance of this flat is quiet good. On the contrary, I'm writing this letter for my discontentment about the furniture that include in your flat and, Also the paints. I am sorry to have to say this but, some of the furniture is off most of them have loose screw, faded paint and the table is wiggling if someone is lean on it. In addition, the paint in the bathroom is faded too. I understand that maintaning a flat like this is tough. Due to the fact, some of the residents here is family. I' am absolutely grateful if you will have a solution in my complaints. I'm looking forward for your quick action to resolved this issue. I suggest that maybe if you have some time we can talk and think about this matter. Yours Sincerely. Cherry Mercado
Dear Sir/Madam

I'am Cherry Mercado, I recently
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moved
in Brooks
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flat
. Brooks
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flat
is
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empressively
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beatiful
and the ambiance of this
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flat
is quiet
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good
.
On the contrary
, I'm writing this letter for my discontentment about the furniture that include in your
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flat
and,
Also
the paints.

I am sorry to
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have to
say this
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but
,
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some
of the furniture is off most of them have loose screw, faded paint and the table is wiggling if someone is lean on it.
In addition
, the paint in the bathroom
is faded
too. I understand that
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maintaning
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
flat
like this is tough. Due to the fact,
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some of the
residents here is family. I' am
absolutely
grateful if you will have a solution in my complaints. I'm looking forward for your quick action
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to resolved
this issue.

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I
suggest that maybe if you have
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some
time we can talk and
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think
about this matter.

Yours
Sincerely
.

Cherry Mercado

IELTS letter You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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