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You are an international student and have borrowed a book from the local public library. You left the book on a bus and when you contacted the bus company, they could not find it. v.5

You are an international student and have borrowed a book from the local public library. You left the book on a bus and when you contacted the bus company, they could not find it. v. 5
Dear Sir or Madam, Last week I borrowed an English grammar book, "English Grammar Exercises - from beginners to advance users" from your library. It was extremely useful, so when I went to visit a friend two days ago, I took the book with me. Unfortunately, I missed the book on the bus. I am hoping you would instruct me how can I recompensate the lost book. When I was on a bus to Darlinghurst, Sydney, I fell asleep and missed my bus stop. I woke up at the next stop and rushed forward to the driver to ask him to stop but forgot to take the book. As a result, the book was left on the bus. When I rang the bus company the next day, they could not find it and suggested that somebody must have picked it up. My library ID is 15478412 and I borrowed the book on 26th November. Could you please let me know what I should do now. As I am an international student and have been facing such incident for the first time, I am not sure what to do next. But of course, I will be ready to pay for a new copy of the book if this is necessary. Yours faithfully, Laura Sian
Dear Sir or Madam,

Last week I borrowed an English grammar
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book
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English Grammar Exercises
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from beginners to advance users
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"
from your library. It was
extremely
useful,
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so
when I went to visit a friend two days ago, I took the
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book
with me. Unfortunately, I missed the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
on the bus. I am hoping you would instruct me how can I
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recompensate
the lost book.

When I was on a bus to
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Darlinghurst
, Sydney, I fell asleep and missed my bus
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stop
. I woke up at the
next
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stop
and rushed forward to the driver to ask him to
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stop
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but
forgot to take the
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book
.
As a result
, the
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book
was
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left
on the bus. When I rang the bus
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company
the
next
day, they could not find it and suggested that somebody
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must
have picked it up. My library ID is 15478412 and I borrowed the
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book
on 26th November.

Could you
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please
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let
me know what I should do
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now
. As I am an international student and have been facing such incident for the
first
time, I am not sure what to do
next
.
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But
of course
, I will be ready to pay for a new copy of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
if this is necessary.

Yours
faithfully
,

Laura
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Sian
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter You are an international student and have borrowed a book from the local public library. You left the book on a bus and when you contacted the bus company, they could not find it. v. 5

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
212 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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