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you and your friends are planning to go to Dubai on vacation.

you and your friends are planning to go to Dubai on vacation. pdb2
Dear Manager, I am Urja From India. Me and my four friends are planning to go on vacation to dubai for one week from 1st of December to 7th of December. We are confused because there are many options available to stay in dubai but I found your hotel and I am very excited to know about services that you provide. We need two rooms and 2 extra beds because we are coming with our childrens. We need some extra service like cattle and milke as well as cab service for sightseeing and pick-up and drop service from airpot as we are travelling with toddler it would be great if cab come on time. I will be happy if you could respond rapidly because we are bit confused about facilities, you can provide. As we are staying for long time I am expecating some discount from your end. Please Email me details at: amnda123@gmail. com. You can reached out to me at given number with more details at: +91 1234988332. Hope to hear from you soon so i can make my plans. Thanks, Sincerely yours, Urja
Dear Manager,

I am
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Urja
From India.
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Me
and my four friends are planning to go on vacation to
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dubai
for one week from 1st of December to 7th of December.

We
are confused
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because
there are
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many
options available to stay in
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dubai
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but
I found your
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hotel and
I am
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very
excited to know about
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services
that you provide.

We need two rooms and 2 extra beds
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because
we are coming with our
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childrens
.
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We
need
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some
extra
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service
like cattle and
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milke
as well
as cab
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service
for sightseeing and pick-up and drop
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service
from
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airpot
as we are travelling with toddler it would be great if cab
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come
on time.

I will be happy if you could respond
rapidly
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because
we are
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bit
confused about facilities, you can provide. As we are staying for long time I am
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expecating
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some
discount from your
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end
.
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Please
Email me
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details
at: amnda123@gmail.
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com
. You can
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reached
out to me at
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given
number with more
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details
at: +91 1234988332. Hope to hear from you
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soon
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so
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i
can
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make
my plans.

Thanks,

Sincerely
yours,

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Urja

IELTS letter you and your friends are planning to go to Dubai on vacation.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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