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Yesterday, there was a terrible explosion in my Village. Many civilians were killed in this explosion. It was a deliberate killing of unarmed and innocent civilians. In this situation of terrible explosion, there are many penniless orphans. And than, they have a lot of requires for their living. Therefore, I want to inspire you to donate a bit of money for them. I also have an arrangement to be able to facilitate their living during this situation. If you want to donate for them, you can connect me.

Yesterday, there was a terrible explosion in my Village. Many civilians were killed in this explosion. It was a deliberate killing of unarmed and innocent civilians. In this situation of terrible explosion, there are many penniless orphans. And than, they have a lot of requires for their living. Therefore, I want to inspire you to donate a bit of money for them. I also have an arrangement to be able to facilitate their living during this situation. If you want to donate for them, you can connect me. 2xjMX
Yesterday, there was a terrible explosion in my Village. Many civilians were killed in this explosion. It was a deliberate killing of unarmed and innocent civilians. In this situation of terrible explosion, there are many penniless orphans. And than, they have a lot of requires for their living. Therefore, I want to inspire you to donate a bit of money for them. I also have an arrangement to be able to facilitate their living during this situation. If you want to donate for them, you can connect me.
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in this explosion. It was a deliberate killing of unarmed and innocent civilians.

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penniless orphans. And
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If you want to donate for them, you can connect me.
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IELTS letter Yesterday, there was a terrible explosion in my Village. Many civilians were killed in this explosion. It was a deliberate killing of unarmed and innocent civilians. In this situation of terrible explosion, there are many penniless orphans. And than, they have a lot of requires for their living. Therefore, I want to inspire you to donate a bit of money for them. I also have an arrangement to be able to facilitate their living during this situation. If you want to donate for them, you can connect me.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
88 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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