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Write a letter to a bus company saying you have left something valuable on the bus and tell them what to do if they find it.

Write a letter to a bus company saying you have left something valuable on the bus and tell them what to do if they find it. n69no
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you that on April 9th I left my suitcase on the train from London to Bristol at 11 a. m. I am quite sure that I got on the train with my suitcase. When I reached the work I realised that I accidentally missed my suitcase on the train beside the seat. It is a new rectangular brown suitcase with two locks. Firthermore there is written my name on the left corner on the front surface. The worst is that all the documents related to my house and car were in it. If you find it, feel free to contact by my mobile phone number +97 7888442 or my e-mail bayimbetovam@mail. ru. I will arrange a pick up with your company. It would also be great if there is possibility to send it via curier service. I will bear the delivery charge. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Your help will be highly appreciated. Yours faithfully, Mekhriban Bayimbetova
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you that on April 9th I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
on the train from London to Bristol at 11 a. m. I am quite sure that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
on the train with my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
.
“When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
I reached the work I
Possible spelling mistake. 'realised' is British English.
realised
that I
accidentally
missed my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
on the train beside the seat. It is a new rectangular brown
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suitcase
with two locks.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Firthermore
there
is written
my name on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
corner on the front surface. The worst is that all the documents related to my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and car were in it. If you find it, feel free to contact by my mobile phone number +97 7888442 or my e-mail
Possible spelling mistake found.
bayimbetovam@mail
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
ru
. I will arrange a pick up with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. It would
also
be great if there is possibility to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
it via
Possible spelling mistake found.
curier
service. I will bear the delivery charge. I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. Your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
will be
highly
appreciated. Yours
faithfully
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Mekhriban
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Bayimbetova

IELTS letter Write a letter to a bus company saying you have left something valuable on the bus and tell them what to do if they find it.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
170 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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