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The road in front of your house got damaged a long ago and nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the municipal authority complaining about the damaged road. v.3

The road in front of your house got damaged a long ago and nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the municipal authority complaining about the damaged road. v. 3
Dear Mr Allen Taylor, I am Cory Gardner, a local resident of Ipswich, Queensland‎, Australia writing on behalf of the residents of the area to notify you about a dilapidated road which is causing unbearable miseries for us. I work at a local school and teach mathematics to young students. This is the first time I am writing to the municipal office to complain about something. The park street, the only road we use to get off and in the community, was damaged around three months ago when we had a heavy downpour for a week. The roads have many holes, crumbly places and is bellow usable-condition with uneven flagstones. We expectantly waited for a month when a team of engineers inspected the road in July. But nothing has been done so far to alleviate our suffering. I would request you to send a team to probe the condition of the road and take immediate action to have it repaired. We already have had some minor accidents in the past months and would like you to prevent a major one. Yours sincerely, Cory Gardner
Dear Mr Allen Taylor,

I am Cory Gardner, a local resident of Ipswich, Queensland‎, Australia writing on behalf of the residents of the area to notify you about a dilapidated
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road
which is causing unbearable miseries for us.

I work at a local school and teach mathematics to young students. This is the
first
time I am writing to the municipal office to complain about something. The park street, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
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road
we
Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".
use to
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get
off and in the community,
was damaged
around three months ago when we had a heavy downpour for a week. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
have
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many
holes, crumbly places and is bellow usable-condition with uneven flagstones.

We
expectantly
waited for a month when a team of engineers inspected the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
in July.
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But
nothing has
been done
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so
far to alleviate our suffering.

I would request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
a team to probe the condition of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
and take immediate action to have it repaired. We already have had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
minor accidents in the past months and would like you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
a major one.

Yours
sincerely
,

Cory Gardner
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter The road in front of your house got damaged a long ago and nothing has been done about it. Write a letter to the municipal authority complaining about the damaged road. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
183 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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