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our child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
 Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: * Say why you would like to go on the trip * Suggest what you could do to help during the trip * Ask other questions about the trip

our child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: * Say why you would like to go on the trip * Suggest what you could do to help during the trip * Ask other questions about the trip nKkP
Hi Head Teacher, I am Karthick father of sai. Sai had told me about the plan for Italy for three days and he told me also to join the trip. I like to join the trip with sat so that we can visit the places in italy. If i join the trip i can able to help you to maintain some of the students so that it will be really helpful for you. I work as a teacher in St. johns school for around 5 years of experience with students, So it will be not much difficulty to take care of students. For the trip expense for my son and for me i will take care of it. I have some questions regarding the trip like what all places we are planning to visit and the accusation on which hotel. For travelling inside the country for places what is the way of transport we are planning to use. Iam expecting a positive reply from you end Thanks and regards, Karthick
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Thanks and regards,

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IELTS letter our child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: * Say why you would like to go on the trip * Suggest what you could do to help during the trip * Ask other questions about the trip

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5.5
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