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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in reference to your advert in The Sydney Journal, July 2021 issue for the babysitter position. I am a student in the University of Sydney, where I study the pediatric nursing course since a year. Supporting my education has become a challege since my father passed away earlier this year. Consequently, I believe that securing this job would not only alleviate my financial burden but also support me in my professional career later on. I have past experience in looking after childeren from my high school days in Melbourne when I used to take care of the 5-year old daughter of a local couple. Additionally, now that I have completed most of my academic course, I am able to attend to the medical needs of children more effectively. I have recieved necessary training regarding the same. During my stay with your family, I would mostly be attending the university and work towards completion of my degree. I don't think I would be eft with much time after fulfiling my responsiblities towards your family and my education. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithful, Akshay Khadse
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in reference to your advert in The Sydney Journal, July 2021 issue for the babysitter position. I am a student in the University of Sydney, where I study the pediatric nursing course since a year.

Supporting my education has become a
challege
since my father passed away earlier this year.
Consequently
, I believe that securing this job would not
only
alleviate my financial burden
but
also
support me in my professional career later on.

I have
past experience
in looking after
childeren
from my high school days in Melbourne when I
used
to take care of the 5-year
old
daughter of a local couple.
Additionally
,
now
that I have completed most of my academic course, I am able to attend to the medical needs of children more
effectively
. I have
recieved
necessary training regarding the same.

During my stay with your family, I would
mostly
be attending the university and work towards completion of my degree. I don't
think
I would be
eft
with much time after
fulfiling
my
responsiblities
towards your family and my education.

I look forward to hearing from you
soon
.

Yours faithful,

Akshay
Khadse
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8 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
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