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As an international student in Sweden, you have an account with a local bank. The monthly bank transfer you receive from your parents has been delayed this month due to an error at your parents’ bank. Write a letter to your bank. In your letter: introduce yourself and ask for a loan say why you need the money tell how you intend to pay back the money

As an international student in Sweden, you have an account with a local bank. The monthly bank transfer you receive from your parents has been delayed this month due to an error at your parents’ bank. Write a letter to your bank. In your letter: introduce yourself and ask for a loan say why you need the money tell how you intend to pay back the money pr1L

Dear Sir or Madam, It is an honour for me to have a transaction account in the oldest bank of Sweden. I am an overseas graduate studying in Cambridge university and have got in trouble to get credit remittance from India as my Father’s bank has issues due to technical glitch in their operating system. My name is Deepak Waja and I have been banking since 2017 as an elite banker. There are bonds and investment under the same account and my customer id is 54674567. As there is a delay in funds arriving I request you to scrutinize and grant a short term overdraft. There are a couple of expenditures which I need to immediately settle and cannot delay it further. My accommodation cheque will be hitting the account next week. Apart from that, university fees have to be transferred as management has given a deadline which finishes in three days. Payment plan can be signed for the relief loan as an easy payment plan in six months. Otherwise, as soon as the funds hit my account from India I will immediately settle the same. Request to kindly look into this matter. Yours Faithfully, Deepak Waja

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IELTS letter As an international student in Sweden, you have an account with a local bank. The monthly bank transfer you receive from your parents has been delayed this month due to an error at your parents’ bank. Write a letter to your bank. In your letter: introduce yourself and ask for a loan say why you need the money tell how you intend to pay back the money

Letter

American English

1 paragraphs

192 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
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