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You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. kQWe
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to inquire about the walking tour of your travel agency. I saw he brochure that you advertised in my friend's house. Hiking and mountain climbing are my passion. I would really love to go to your walking tour and take some breathtaking pictures of the nature and animals in the mountain. It is also my way to meditate and unwind because of the hectic and stressful life at my work. I would also ask if what date it would be and how much it will cost so I can book early and file a leave at the office. Unfortunately, my health condition is not that good. I am having an asthma attack and worried if I could finish the walk. Is there any drinking station for us to rehydrate and take a break for awhile or a paramedic to rescue if some of us is not feeling well? Thank you and I am hoping for your response. Yours Faithfully, Mikee
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to inquire about the walking tour of your travel agency. I
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that you advertised in my friend's
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Hiking and mountain climbing are my passion. I would
really
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love
to go to your walking tour and take
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some
breathtaking pictures of the nature and animals in the mountain. It is
also
my way to meditate and unwind
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because
of the hectic and stressful life at my work. I would
also
ask if what date it would be and how much it will cost
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so
I can book early and file a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
at the office.

Unfortunately, my health condition is not that
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good
. I am having an asthma attack and worried if I could finish the walk. Is there any drinking station for us to rehydrate and take a break for
Did you mean "a while"?
awhile
or a paramedic to rescue if
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some
of us is not feeling well?

Thank you and I am hoping for your response.

Yours
Faithfully
,

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Mikee
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IELTS letter You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

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