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A year ago, you lent your favourite book to a friend who you thought would enjoy it. Unfortunately, your friend has forgotten to return it. The book has sentimental value to you as it had been presented by your grandmother. v.3

A year ago, you lent your favourite book to a friend who you thought would enjoy it. Unfortunately, your friend has forgotten to return it. The book has sentimental value to you as it had been presented by your grandmother. v. 3
Dear Mim, Its been a while since I have received your letter. Hopefully, you are doing great. How are Eric, Sumi and Amelia doing? I wish I could visit you and spend some quality time with you all. I have recently joined a large telecommunication company in Brisbane as a project manager and I am enjoying the job. Are you still taking the yoga classes? Do you still read books the way you did in the past? I wish I have been a passionate reader like you. Have you finished reading 'Lady Susan' by Jane Austen that you borrowed from me about a year ago? I quite enjoyed reading it and this book is special to me as my grandmother gave it to me on my 14th birthday. This book is a reminder of her who had been a loving personality and an idol in my teenage. I hope you enjoyed reading it as much as I did and you would not mind returning it. I consider it one of the greatest possessions of mine. I would really appreciate if you can return the book via the postal service at your convenience. If you are yet to finish it, send me after you read it. Why don't you visit us sometime during the summer vacation? We would be glad to have you at our home. With lots of love, Ella
Dear
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Mim
,

Did you mean "It's" (="It has") instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Its
been a while since I have received your letter.
Hopefully
, you are doing great. How
The singular proper name Eric must be used with "is".
are
Eric,
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Sumi
and Amelia doing? I wish I could visit you and spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
quality time with you all.

I have recently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
a large telecommunication
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
in Brisbane as a project
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
manager and
I am enjoying the job. Are you
still
taking the yoga classes? Do you
still
read
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
the way you did in the past? I wish I have been a passionate reader like you. Have you finished reading 'Lady Susan' by Jane Austen that you borrowed from me about a year ago? I quite enjoyed reading it and this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
is special to me as my grandmother gave it to me on my 14th birthday. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
is a reminder of her who had been a loving personality and an idol in my teenage. I hope you enjoyed reading it as much as I did and you would not mind returning it. I consider it one of the greatest possessions of mine.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would
really
appreciate if you can return the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
via the postal service at your convenience. If you are
yet
to finish it,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me after you read it.

Why don't you visit us sometime during the summer vacation? We would be glad to have you at our home.

With lots of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
,

Ella
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter A year ago, you lent your favourite book to a friend who you thought would enjoy it. Unfortunately, your friend has forgotten to return it. The book has sentimental value to you as it had been presented by your grandmother. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
229 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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