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A recent newspaper article discussed the threat of technology taking over our homes and lives. You think that the views expressed in the article were one-sided and have decided to write a letter to the editor. You want to highlight the benefits of technology in our daily lives

A recent newspaper article discussed the threat of technology taking over our homes and lives. You think that the views expressed in the article were one-sided and have decided to write a letter to the editor. You want to highlight the benefits of technology in our daily lives 2bR2w
Dear editor, I am writing this letter in response to your article about the usage of technology on our daily lives, on the grounds that only negative effects were taken into account. As such, I decided to express my stand on the topic As the article correctly pinpointed, it is true that recent advances of scientific research allowed technology to improve by leaps and bounds, so as to shrink the dimension of devices of every kind while increasing their potentialities. It comes as no surprise that the amount of such commodities at our disposal increased at dizzying speed, endowing our houses with devices of every sort. What I found ludicrous, however, is the inaccurate depiction of such, as the article names it, technological flood. Whilst it is true that a chunk of the population, particularly the elderly, found their lives impinged by the onset of smartphone and tablets, this only stands as a stark example of the inability of such people to adapt to this brand-new reality, which is all but deleterious. In fact, not only are these devices conceived as a means to facilitate us overcoming the hurdles posed by the daily grind, but should we use them conscientiously, we would even suss out their fundamental utility in smoothing out problems in our way to achieve what we desire. Were one to look at the bright side, the enormous wealth of information disclosed by the onset of the internet, allowed everyone to achieve objectives previously deemed far from their grasp. All things considered, there is mounting evidence of the rise of smartphone addiction amongst the younger generation, but the blame is to be put on the behaviour of people in particular, and not in technology in itself. In fact, only by curbing the unnecessary time spent on these devices will we be able to really benefit from their usage. Regards.
Dear editor,

I am writing this letter in response to your article about the usage of technology on our daily
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lives
, on the grounds that
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only
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negative
effects
were taken
into account. As such, I decided to express my stand on the
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As the article
correctly
pinpointed, it is true that recent advances of scientific research
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allowed
technology to
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improve
by leaps and bounds,
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so as to
shrink the dimension of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
of every kind while increasing their potentialities. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
as no surprise that the amount of such commodities at our disposal increased at dizzying speed, endowing our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
of every sort. What I found ludicrous,
however
, is the inaccurate depiction of such, as the article names it, technological flood. Whilst it is true that a chunk of the population,
particularly
the elderly, found their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
impinged by the onset of smartphone and tablets, this
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only
stands as a stark example of the inability of such
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people
to adapt to this brand-new reality, which is all
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but
deleterious.

In fact, not
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only
are these
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devices
conceived as a means to facilitate us overcoming the hurdles posed by the daily grind,
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but
should we
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use
them
conscientiously
, we would even suss out their fundamental utility in smoothing out problems in our way to achieve what we desire. Were one to look at the bright side, the enormous wealth of information disclosed by the onset of the internet,
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allowed
everyone to achieve objectives previously deemed far from their grasp.

All things considered, there is mounting evidence of the rise of smartphone addiction amongst the younger generation,
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but
the blame is to
be put
on the
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behaviour
of
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people
in particular
, and not in technology in itself. In fact,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
only
by curbing the unnecessary time spent on these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
will we be able to
really
benefit from their usage.

Regards.
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IELTS letter A recent newspaper article discussed the threat of technology taking over our homes and lives. You think that the views expressed in the article were one-sided and have decided to write a letter to the editor. You want to highlight the benefits of technology in our daily lives

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