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Your favorite pet in your life

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I had a pretty cat when I was 18 years old. He is all of the things in my life. I can not stay with him anymore but I think he will get a happy life in heaven. I met him when I came back home from high school. The first time, I accidentally met a little white cotton in the cage of the merchant. He had two colors for each eye. One is yellow and another one is blue. Having white brighten fur and straight tail. That makes him more special than any cat. I decided to buy him eight hundred Vnd. His name is Ú Nụ. He likes to fish and pork. I fed him with lots of food and made him like a pig in order to give him an embrace all day. He has a fancy with sunlight, he rolls and crawls under it every morning. Even though he is fat, he is an energetic cat. He likes to catch something smaller than him. For example rat, butterfly, . . etc, I love him more than any pets that I ever had before. He is still in my heart and never blurs. I just ưant to say goodbye and have a better life in heaven Ú Nụ.
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IELTS essay Your favorite pet in your life

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
211 words
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