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writting a paragaraph (120-150 word) about a product you have bought recently

writting a paragaraph (120-150 word) about a product you have bought recently Q2e23
Because of Covid-19, I have to study online. So I and my mother decided to buy a laptop. I went to laptop shop last week. There are many kinds of laptop in here. I was a bit confused. I didn't know i should choose what kind of laptop. So i asked the saleman. He offered me to buy Laptop Dell Inspiron 3505. With suitable price, i decided to buy it. It looks like mordern shape. Its size isn't too big so i can bring it to school easily. And with black color, it is very nice. Specially, It has many good points such as having big battery so i mustn't charge to much, having RAM 8GB, SSD 256GB Besides good points, it have a bad points: don't play some games. However, i bought it to study so i don't care this point. With high quality, i will recommend to some friends. Because it ran very well, and i studied many things through it.
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Because
of Covid-19, I
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have to
study online.
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So
I and my mother decided to
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buy
a
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laptop
. I went to
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laptop
shop last week. There are
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many
kinds of
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laptop
in here. I was a bit confused. I didn't know
Did you mean "I"?
i
should choose what kind of
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laptop
.
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So
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i
asked the
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saleman
. He offered me to
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buy
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Laptop
Dell
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Inspiron
3505. With suitable price,
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i
decided to
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buy
it. It looks like
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mordern
shape. Its size isn't too
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big
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so
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i
can bring it to school
easily
. And with black color, it is
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very
nice.
Specially
, It has
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many
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good
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points
such as having
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big
battery
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so
Did you mean "I"?
i
mustn't charge
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to
much, having RAM
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8GB
, SSD
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256GB


Besides
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good
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points
, it
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have
a
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bad
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points
: don't play
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some
games.
However
,
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i
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bought
it to study
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so
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i
don't care this
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point
. With high quality,
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i
will recommend to
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some
friends.
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Because
it ran
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very
well, and
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i
studied
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many
things through it.
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IELTS essay writting a paragaraph (120-150 word) about a product you have bought recently

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
163 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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