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WRITE AN ARTICLE ABOUT MENTAL HEALTH

WRITE AN ARTICLE ABOUT MENTAL HEALTH Eq16D
A person physically and mentally healthy it should be said that the person is a healthier one. Physical and mental health is balanced one which is like two sides of a coin, without one of it there is no existence. In this 21st century, most people are affected by mental health issues it has no age limit which is not able to understand in the first stage. Mental issues are due to loneliness, stress, deficiency of vitamins, by birth etc. If it identifies in the earlier stage which must be treated effectively and could be got a complete cure. People who are living alone must involve some activities or mingle with people in their community. Holidays are the best remedy to improve mental health which helps to pleasure the mind and it should help to meet different people and different communities. Someone who has stress in their job or life must immediately contact a psychologist and get better advice, it could improve their lifestyle. Vitamin supplements have to reduce stress which strengthens the mind as well. Children’s mental disorders by birth can find in their childhood it will be more helpful to improve their future life. Finally, my opinion is that don’t avoid the people who have mentally challenged we need to take care and consider them as our family.
A person
physically
and mentally healthy it should
be said
that the person is a healthier one. Physical and
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mental
health
is balanced
one which is like two sides of a coin, without one of it there is no existence. In this 21st century, most
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people
are
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affected
by
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mental
health issues it has no age limit which is not able to understand in the
first
stage.

Mental issues are due to loneliness,
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stress
, deficiency of vitamins, by birth etc. If it identifies in the earlier stage which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be treated
effectively
and could be
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got
a complete cure.
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People
who are living alone
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must
involve
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some
activities or mingle with
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people
in their community. Holidays are the best remedy to
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improve
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mental
health which
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helps
to pleasure the mind and it should
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help
to
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meet
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different
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people
and
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different
communities.

Someone who has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
in their job or life
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
immediately contact a psychologist and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
better advice, it could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their lifestyle. Vitamin supplements
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have to
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reduce
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stress
which strengthens the mind
as well
. Children’s
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mental
disorders by birth can find in their childhood it will be more helpful to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their future life.

Finally
, my opinion is that don’t avoid the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who have mentally challenged we need to take care and consider them as our family.
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IELTS essay WRITE AN ARTICLE ABOUT MENTAL HEALTH

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
220 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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