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Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes or violence increase. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Serious crimes need capital punishment so that the offender are unable to get involved in the crime in the future. However, If they want to stop the acts of violation in the future then it would be better to forget him and judge him for a change. Overall, I agree with the fact that punishment is the way to avoid the crime to be increased and hence our lives become more secure. If the wrongdoer wants to be a good man and there is a particular financial or personal problem that led him to the wrong way, then it would be the nice option to forgive him and try to solve the problem he have. Although by this way, some bad man may become effective part of the society but some do not bring themselves to the right path because they are very much used to of it. The person that _ involved in the crime and never try to stop the law-breaking act should be punished in the extremely serious way. However, it totally depends on the nature of crime. Some crime led to a capital punishment and some may require a small penalty. The law-making institutions are responsible to bring the bad man to the right level of punishment that he deserves. If there is weak legislation to properly handle the offender, it may become our society less secure for the good man. The government should be the responsible authority to provide a secure and better state to live. Laws should be implemented and executed in the most proper way that do not allow the offender to commit violent acts or to break the law in any way and to any extent. To sum up, it is the responsibility of the state runner to stop people to involved in crime. It may be done through solving the problems of the people that led them to commit that violence act or by the punishment accordingly.
Serious
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crimes
need capital
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punishment
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so
that the offender are unable to
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get
involved in the
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crime
in the future.
However
, If they want to
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stop
the
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acts
of violation in the future then it would be better to forget him and judge him for a
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change
.

Overall
, I
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agree with the fact that
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punishment
is the way to avoid the
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crime
to
be increased
and
hence
our
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lives
become more secure. If the wrongdoer wants to be a
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good
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man
and there is a particular financial or personal problem that led him to the
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wrong
way, then it would be the nice option to forgive him and try to solve the problem he
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have
. Although by this way,
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some
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bad
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man
may become effective part of the society
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but
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some
do not bring themselves to the right path
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because
they are
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very
much
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used
to of it. The person that _ involved in the
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crime
and never try to
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stop
the law-breaking
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act
should
be punished
in the
extremely
serious way.
However
, it
totally
depends on the nature of
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crime
.
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Some
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crime
led to a capital
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punishment
and
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some
may require a
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small
penalty. The law-making institutions are responsible to bring the
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bad
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man
to the right level of
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punishment
that he deserves. If there is weak legislation to
properly
handle the offender, it may become our society less secure for the
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good
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man
. The
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government
should be the responsible authority to provide a secure and better state to
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live
. Laws should
be implemented
and executed in the most proper way that do not
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allow
the offender to commit violent
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acts
or to break the law in any way and to any extent. To sum up, it is the responsibility of the state runner to
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stop
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people
to involved in
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crime
. It may
be done
through solving the problems of the
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people
that led them to commit that violence
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act
or by the
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punishment
accordingly
.
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IELTS essay Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes or violence increase. with this opinion?

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
326 words
5.5
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