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With the increased global demand in oil and gas,undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. q29a
Nowadays, control of disease are getting most important for every ages of people. these people claim that prevention of disease can be better option than treating disease. this essay will amplify that why prevention is necessary over cure. With regards to current generation, they are affected more by many disease. firstly people are doing much work in their daily life, because of the reason they could not get chance for exercise, such as gym walking etc. for example, people are suffering more and more by diabetes at this moment which can be implemented by doing exercise or proper guidelines, whereas it's treatment is much expensive. these few instances have bolstered the existing concept that disease can be prevents by proper steps. It is clear evidence that day by day treatment cost are increased, people could not cover up these cost in every time. in addition, many of the peoples are facing many  dangerous diseases, which treatment is much lengthy and expensive. such as one of my uncle who is getting healthy day by day, he took treatment and medicines but it did not work, he could not even do any works and then he followed proper guideline for dieting and maintaining himself. overall the idea of the prevention is much effective than researching and treatment. To sum up this essay amplified that, people who are suffering any disease they should prevent it than any treatment. i believe that, by taking genuine steps can prevent all disease easily rather than any kind of expensive or lengthy treatment process which can be harmful for health
Nowadays, control of
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disease
are getting most
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important
for every
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ages
of
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people
.
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these
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people
claim that prevention of
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disease
can be better option than treating
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disease
.
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this
essay will amplify that why prevention is necessary over cure.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
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current
generation, they are
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affected
more by
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many
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disease
.
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firstly
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people
are doing
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much
work in their daily life,
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because
of the reason they could not
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get
chance for exercise, such as gym walking etc.
for example
,
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people
are suffering more and more by diabetes at this moment which can
be implemented
by doing exercise or proper guidelines, whereas it's
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treatment
is
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much
expensive.
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these
few instances have bolstered the existing concept that
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disease
can be
Consider using the past participle "prevented"?
prevents
by proper steps.

It is
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clear
evidence that day by day
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treatment
cost
are increased
,
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people
could not cover up these cost in every time.
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in
addition,
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many
of the
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peoples
are facing
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many
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dangerous
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diseases
, which
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treatment
is
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much
lengthy and expensive.
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such
as one of my uncle who is getting healthy day by day, he took
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treatment
and medicines
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but
it did not work, he could not even do any
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works and
then he followed proper guideline for dieting and maintaining himself.
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overall
the
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idea
of the prevention is
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much
Use "(effective)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
effective
than researching and treatment.

To sum up this essay amplified that,
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people
who are suffering any
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disease
they should
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prevent
it than any
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treatment
.
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i
believe that, by taking genuine steps can
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prevent
all
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disease
easily
rather
than any kind of expensive or lengthy
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treatment
process which can be harmful for
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health
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IELTS essay With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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