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With an increasing number of people eating fast food, which if eating too regularly can cause health issues, some people think that the only solution is to ban it completely. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, growing population, especially youth, is eating junk food on a regular basis. It can lead to various health problems. Some people are of the opinion that the only way to solve this problem is to ban it. This essay will talk about why this is not a viable solution according to me. Let us understand the reason, why more number of people are opting for junk food. Fast food, the name itself indicates it is not only available very quickly, but also cheap. For instance, in metro cities, where people are working almost throughout the day, they tend to eat fast food to save their precious time and money. Apart from this, the younger generation of the country tends to follow the Western culture, junk food chains like Mc Donald’s being one of them. Consuming such junk food on a daily basis will lead to different health problems as they contain lot of preservatives and fats. It can mainly cause a person to become overweight leading to issues like obesity, high cholesterol levels, etc. According to me, banning anything leads to the illegal selling of the banned item. If fast food is banned it will cause people to buy them at higher costs maybe illegally. Instead, health awareness must be done about eating healthy food rather than fast food. To conclude, I do not completely agree that fast food should be banned to avoid its consumption on a large scale. In my opinion, we should rather focus on the advantages of eating healthy food and promote the same on a large scale.
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youth, is eating
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junk
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on a regular basis. It can lead to various health problems.
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Some
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people
are of the opinion that the
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way to solve this problem is to ban it. This essay will talk about why this is not a viable solution according to me.

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us understand the reason, why more number of
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people
are opting for
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junk
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food
.
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Fast
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food
, the name itself indicates it is not
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only
available
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very
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cheap
.
For instance
, in metro cities, where
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people
are working almost throughout the day, they tend to eat
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fast
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food
to save their precious time and money. Apart from this, the younger generation of the country tends to follow the Western culture,
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junk
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food
chains like
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Mc
Donald’s being one of them.

Consuming such
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junk
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food
on a daily basis will lead to
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different
health problems as they contain
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lot of
preservatives and fats. It can
mainly
cause a person to become overweight leading to issues like obesity, high cholesterol levels, etc.
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According to me
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If
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is banned
it will cause
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people
to
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buy
them at higher costs maybe
illegally
.
Instead
, health awareness
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must
be done
about eating healthy
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food
rather
than
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fast
food.

To conclude
, I do not completely
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agree
that
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should
be banned
to avoid its consumption on a large scale. In my opinion, we should
rather
focus on the advantages of eating healthy
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food
and promote the same on a large scale.

IELTS essay With an increasing number of people eating fast food, which if eating too regularly can cause health issues, some people think that the only solution is to ban it completely.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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