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Why are some people who leave school early more successful compared with those who complete their studies. Provide reasons why they are more successful and what are the requirements for success?

Why are some people who leave school early more successful compared with those who complete their studies. Provide reasons why they are more successful and what are the requirements for success? 2LWo
It is often believed that individuals who left their early academics from universities are more prosperous and popular whereas others ended up with skilled jobs and business by finishing their studies from educational institutions. This essay will discuss the reasons behind the victorious people with less qualifications followed by the required steps in order to gain a successful life. One of the predefined reasons is working hard on the younger stage promotes one to more failure, which is due to lack of education and knowledge. As a result, this makes the person not to have a successful life and faces a lot of problems. Because of this, people start believing themselves to motivate and learn from their own mistakes in order to achieve their dreams since everyone knows that failure is the first step to convert it to a successful life. For example, many of the highest grades passed out from top universities are associated with Bill Gates, Microsoft though he is a dropout student from school at an early stage but able to build such a big company with his level of interest. Moving further, a good grip on communication and convincing skills are proven self motivations besides hardworking are required possible tools to enhance and experience the goals. Those who have strong communication skills are more able to control the people working under them along with convincing power in order to convince them of their ideas to generate successful business. In addition, another possible requirement is a human being who is capable of working honestly are the one able to find the journey to success. For instance, Scientists after failing many attempts in the experiments, are the most successful living beings by their inventions. Therefore, many of them took failure as the challenge and succeeded in the race. In conclusion, despite being initial dropouts from study centres and universities, many of them have achieved many things to achieve their dreams. However, a lot of graduates believed to achieve their goals by a different skills they have which are equally important with an academic qualification
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their early academics from universities are more prosperous and popular whereas others ended up with skilled jobs and business by finishing their studies from educational institutions. This essay will discuss the reasons behind the victorious
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people
with
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qualifications followed by the required steps in order to gain a
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life.

One of the predefined reasons is working
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hard
on the younger stage promotes one to more failure, which is due to lack of education and knowledge.
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makes
the person not to have a
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life and faces
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a lot of
problems.
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people
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start
believing themselves to motivate and learn from their
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own
mistakes in order to achieve their dreams since everyone knows that failure is the
first
step to convert it to a
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successful
life.
For example
,
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many
of the highest grades passed out from top universities
are associated
with Bill Gates, Microsoft though he is a dropout student from school at an early stage
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but
able to build such a
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big
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company
with his level of interest.

Moving
further
, a
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good
grip on communication and convincing
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skills
are proven
self motivations
besides
hardworking
are required
possible tools to enhance and experience the goals. Those who have strong communication
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skills
are more able to control the
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people
working under them along with convincing power in order to convince them of their
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ideas
to generate
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successful
business.
In addition
, another possible requirement is a human being who is capable of working
honestly
are the one able to find the journey to success.
For instance
, Scientists after failing
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many
attempts in the experiments, are the most
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successful
living beings by their inventions.
Therefore
,
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many
of them took failure as the challenge and succeeded in the race.

In conclusion
, despite being initial dropouts from study
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centres
and universities,
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of them have achieved
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things to achieve their dreams.
However
,
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a lot of
graduates believed to achieve their goals by a
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different
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skills
they have which are
equally
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important
with an academic qualification
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IELTS essay Why are some people who leave school early more successful compared with those who complete their studies. Provide reasons why they are more successful and what are the requirements for success?

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4 paragraphs
345 words
6.5
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