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what do you think about unetical & unacceptable advertisement?

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Advertisement Technology has been evolving especially in the digital era. It has changed our spending behaviors, especially with our personal data online. As we may notice, this can be extremely unethical especially how the data manipulating our buying psychology. Most of us like shopping and we believe that it is cheaper to buy online. However, in many situations, we purchase more than what we need. Especially, after we see the fancy advertisement about the product features. For instance, we may buy several phone casing in order to enjoy a discount. Secondly, advertisement methology is based on artificial intelligence which use our personal data to predict the buying behavior. The companies always track your online behavior which they can use the information to target you with the customized advertisement. With this, we constantly addicted to shopping online and eventually spend more than what we need. Lastly, advertisement can be sometimes misleading. The companies may overly promote some of the products and services with exaggerated features. For example, credit card advertisements that paint the image of luxury lifestyle if you own it. In conclusion, advertisement is important especially in the digital economy. However, we need to set better and broader advertisement policy to avoid unethical or unacceptable advertisement.
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Technology has been evolving
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especially
in the digital era. It has
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changed
our spending behaviors,
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especially
with our personal data
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online
. As we may notice, this can be
extremely
unethical
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especially
how the data manipulating our buying psychology.

Most of us like
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shopping and
we believe that it is cheaper to
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buy
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online
.
However
, in
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many
situations, we
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purchase
more than what we need.
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Especially
, after we
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see
the fancy
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advertisement
about the product features.
For instance
, we may
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buy
several phone casing in order to enjoy a discount.

Secondly
,
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advertisement
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methology
is based
on artificial intelligence which
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use
our personal data to predict the buying behavior. The
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companies
always
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track
your
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online
behavior which they can
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use
the information to target you with the customized
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advertisement
. With this, we
constantly
addicted to shopping
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online
and
eventually
spend more than what we need.

Lastly
,
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advertisement
can be
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sometimes
misleading. The
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companies
may
overly
promote
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some of the
products and services with exaggerated features.
For example
, credit card
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advertisements
that paint the image of luxury lifestyle if you
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own
it.

In conclusion
,
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is
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important
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especially
in the digital economy.
However
, we need to set better and broader
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advertisement
policy to avoid unethical or unacceptable
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.
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IELTS essay what do you think about unetical & unacceptable advertisement?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
206 words
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