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Using the animals for mankind needs has always been a significant issue between the animal rights advocates and others that believe these alive creatures are necessary for edible products and medicine in human life.

Using the animals for mankind needs has always been a significant issue between the animal rights advocates and others that believe these alive creatures are necessary for edible products and medicine in human life. pRb8L
Using the animals for mankind needs has always been a significant issue between the animal rights advocates and others that believe these alive creatures are necessary for edible products and medicine in human life. Personally, I don't agree with extremism in both views. Killing indiscriminately the animals is not explainable. Given the growth of the population all around the world, consumption of meat food has increased. According to the animal defenders, it is an alert because the animals as innocent creatures must have living right like humans. Moreover, some species are dramatically endangered in extinction due to the illegal hunting. Also, applying the animals for the scientific research in the laboratories is considered selfish behavior, because many of them are killed each year during experimental studies. In my view, alternative foods such as verbal foods can reduce the rate of killing the animals. On the other hand, the supporters of using the animals think, they will protect humans from possible calamities such as starving. In fact a considerable amount of human foods are provided by meat, since verbal foods aren't enough for all people across the world. Secondly, without the animals definitely mice, scientific progresses could achieve, as well. In modern medicine various drugs and remedies have been made with several experiments on the animals in the laboratories. In conclusion, in order to cease the permanent discussion between two different views about protecting animals or using them for human needs, I believe we need a balanced view that helps animals to be alive as much as possible. For instance, substitution edible products are recommended.
Using the
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animals
for mankind needs has always been a significant issue between the
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animal
rights advocates
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and others
that believe these alive creatures are necessary for edible products and medicine in
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human
life.
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, I don't
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agree
with extremism in both
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views
. Killing
indiscriminately
the
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animals
is not explainable.
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Given
the growth of the population all around the world, consumption of meat
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food
has increased. According to the
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animal
defenders, it is an alert
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because
the
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animals
as innocent creatures
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must
have living right like
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humans
.
Moreover
,
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some
species are
dramatically
endangered in extinction due to the illegal hunting.
Also
, applying the
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animals
for the scientific research in the laboratories
is considered
selfish behavior,
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because
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many
of them
are killed
each year during experimental studies. In my
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view
, alternative
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foods
such as verbal
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foods
can
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reduce
the rate of killing the animals.

On the other hand
, the supporters of using the
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animals
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think
, they will protect
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humans
from possible calamities such as starving. In fact a considerable amount of
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human
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foods
are provided
by meat, since verbal
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foods
aren't
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enough
for all
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people
across the world.
Secondly
, without the
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animals
definitely mice, scientific progresses could achieve,
as well
. In modern medicine various drugs and remedies have
been made
with several experiments on the
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animals
in the laboratories.

In conclusion
, in order to cease the permanent discussion between two
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different
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views
about protecting
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animals
or using them for
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human
needs, I believe we need a balanced
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view
that
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helps
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animals
to be alive as much as possible.
For instance
, substitution edible products
are recommended
.

IELTS essay Using the animals for mankind needs has always been a significant issue between the animal rights advocates and others that believe these alive creatures are necessary for edible products and medicine in human life.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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