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USE SOCIAL MEDIA IN THE CLASSROOM

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As you can see, technology has enabled us to accomplish everything. It is also developing at a faster rate than ever before. But some parents have expressed the worry about permitting mobile phones to be used in school. That is something I completely agree with. On the top reason, mobile phones make us depend on them. When we don't know or don't remember anything, we look it up on the internet easily. As a result they will make the child lazier in thinking. Ony my view, they may be able to use it after classrooms. Moreover, using the smart phones in the classroom is too risky for the child. The teacher can't unable to control all the students at the same time. They have no way of knowing what information is being acquired. It's too easy to be addicted to social media. Badly, some students may be able to use it to cheat on tests. For teens, the creative aspect is the most important. When we think, our brains need to be active, which makes us intelligent. That why I do not suggest allowing cell phones to be used in school.
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us depend on them. When we don't know or don't remember anything, we look it up on the internet
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my view, they may be able to
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it after classrooms.

Moreover
, using the smart
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phones
in the classroom is too risky for the child. The teacher can't unable to control all the students at the same time. They have no way of knowing what information is
being acquired
. It's too easy to
be addicted
to social media.
Badly
,
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some
students may be able to
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use
it to cheat on
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tests
.

For teens, the creative aspect is the most
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important
. When we
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think
, our brains need to be active, which
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makes
us intelligent. That why I do not suggest allowing cell
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phones
to be
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used
in school.
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IELTS essay USE SOCIAL MEDIA IN THE CLASSROOM

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
191 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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