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Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries. How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today?

In most countries the people who have completed their school level are suffering to get job. I totally agree with this statement, as well as that, they are facing a number of issues such as getting marriage and health caring. Obtaining job-offer after schooling is an obsession to huge number of youth, this is due to many reasons. The most considerable one is that the number of graduates is much more than the vacancies, that is to say, it would be so difficult to had work opportunities, unless government took some remedial measures. To illustrate, a recent study by University of London showed that %70 percentage of school-finishers are jobless. This kind of data explain how unemployment rate is high among the youngster.
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reasons. The most considerable one is that the number of graduates is much more than the vacancies,
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so
difficult to had work opportunities, unless
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government
took
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some
remedial measures. To illustrate, a recent study by University of London
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showed
that %70 percentage of school-finishers are jobless. This kind of data
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how unemployment rate is high among the youngster.
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IELTS essay Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leavers in most countries. How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face young people today?

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123 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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