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Topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. 0Rrn
Many people choose their jobs based on the size of the salary offered. Personally, I disagree with the idea that money is the key consideration when deciding on a career because I believe that other factors are equally important. On the one hand, I agree that money is necessary in order for people to meet their basic needs. For example, we all need money to pay for housing, food, bills, health care, and education. Most people consider it a priority to at least earn a salary that allows them to cover these needs and have a reasonable quality of life. If people chose their jobs based on enjoyment or other non-financial factors, they might find it difficult to support themselves. Artists and musicians, for instance, are known for choosing a career path that they love, but that does not always provide them with enough money to live comfortably and raise a family. Nevertheless, I believe that other considerations are just as important as what we earn in our jobs. Firstly, personal relationships and the atmosphere in a workplace are extremely important when choosing a job. Having a good manager or friendly colleagues, for example, can make a huge difference to workers’ levels of happiness and general quality of life. Secondly, many people’s feelings of job satisfaction come from their professional achievements, the skills they learn, and the position they reach, rather than the money they earn. Finally, some people choose a career because they want to help others and contribute something positive to society. In conclusion, while salaries certainly affect people’s choice of profession, I do not believe that money outweighs all other motivators.
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their basic needs.
For example
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money
to pay for housing, food, bills, health care, and education. Most
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people
consider it a priority to at least earn a salary that
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allows
them to cover these needs and have a reasonable quality of life. If
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people
chose their
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jobs
based on enjoyment or
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other
non-financial factors, they might find it difficult to support themselves. Artists and musicians,
for instance
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are known
for choosing a career path that they
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love
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when choosing a
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. Having a
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manager or friendly colleagues,
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a huge difference to workers’ levels of happiness and general quality of life.
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feelings of
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satisfaction
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come
from their professional achievements, the
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skills
they learn, and the position they reach,
rather
than the
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money
they earn.
Finally
,
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people
choose a career
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because
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others and contribute something
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positive
to society.

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affect
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people’s
choice of profession, I do not believe that
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money
outweighs all
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other
motivators.
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IELTS essay Topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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