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Some countries are struggling with on increasing the rate of crime many people think that having a police on streets is the only way to reduce to what extent do you agree or disagree

Some countries are struggling with on increasing the rate of crime many people think that having a police on streets is the only way to reduce Bj5a
It is commonly seen that in some countries the crime rate has become a major issue. It is analysed by a few individuals that patrolling is the best way to reduce the chance of crime although, I agree with this view that Police volunteers import and some other measures can help to handle this problem. To embark with, staffing armed forces can deter the criminal activities in many ways. Firstly the main reason that increase rate of crime is the lack of supervision if the police would be available on streets chance of crime main negligible because of police create sense or fear when anyone trying to offence, they would be fear of police because they are protecting to city Corner to Corner. Furthermore police will be easily eapproachable when people will be able to report action with in few time. On the other hand, undoubtedly supervision of police is important but some other way that can handle to criminal activities which could be addresse root call of criminal which is illiteracy. In other words it has been wisely said by someone, with the use of gun government can finish to terrorist whereas with the help of education we can finish all the terrorism. Providing a better facility of education it would be a Win-Win situation for both the nation and the people. Newzealand for example, is the country where 70% of crime rate has been reduced in last few years because of education. To conclude, recapitulsting the whole discussion I would like to epitomize by saying that dealing the rate of crime police play an important role but some other way can tackle this problem efficiently like as a investment in education field as well as security because illiteracy is a key point that can lead to crime.
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that in
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some
countries the
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crime
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rate
has become a major issue. It is
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analysed
by a few individuals that patrolling is the best way to
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reduce
the chance of
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crime
although, I
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agree
with this view that
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Police
volunteers import and
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some
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other
measures can
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help
to handle this problem.

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many
ways.
Firstly
the main reason that increase
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rate
of
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crime
is the lack of supervision if the
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police
would be available on streets chance of
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crime
main negligible
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because
of
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police
create sense or fear when anyone trying to
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offence
, they would be fear of
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police
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because
they are protecting to city Corner to Corner.
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Furthermore
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police
will be
easily
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eapproachable
when
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people
will be able to report action with in few time.

On the
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hand,
undoubtedly
supervision of
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police
is
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important
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but
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some
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other
way that can handle to criminal activities which could be
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addresse
root call of criminal which is illiteracy. In
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other
words it has been
wisely
said by someone, with the
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use
of gun
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government
can finish to terrorist whereas with the
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help
of education we can finish all the terrorism. Providing a better facility of education it would be a Win-Win situation for both the nation and the
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people
.
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Newzealand
for example
, is the country where 70% of
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crime
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rate
has been
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reduced
in last few years
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because
of education.

To conclude
,
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recapitulsting
the whole discussion I would like to epitomize by saying that dealing the
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rate
of
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crime
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police
play an
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important
role
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but
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some
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other
way can tackle this problem
efficiently
like as
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a
investment in education field
as well
as security
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because
illiteracy is a key point that can lead to
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crime
.
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IELTS essay Some countries are struggling with on increasing the rate of crime many people think that having a police on streets is the only way to reduce

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