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TODAY, THE QUALITY OF LIFE IN LARGE CITIES IS DECREASING. DISCUSS THE CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS v.3

TODAY, THE QUALITY OF LIFE IN LARGE CITIES IS DECREASING. DISCUSS THE CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS v. 3
In this era, there has been a steady decline in the quality of life for inhabitants of metropolitan cities. While this essay will discuss air pollution as one of the multifarious factors attributed to the poor living conditions in major towns, it will also proffer the usage of bio-degradable fuels as a possible solution to this issue. Air pollution can be seen as an inevitable chaos which is often associated with heavily populated areas. This pollution, however, can be products of exhaust from vehicles. Take for instance, the bubbling city of Lagos, Nigeria, more than an average of the workers there resort to private means of transportation. As a result, a fleet of cars are often seen on the roads, and these cars, nonetheless, release an immense amount of CO2 in the atmosphere, which drastically affects the health of the inhabitants. Furthermore, this ugly trend is not left untackled, as the use of ecofriendly fuels and gases can be one of the ways to avert this atmospheric pollution. The governments should ensure that the end products of the fuels which its citizens consume are environmental friendly. When these are used, several health-related sicknesses can be drastically reduced, and thus, a healthier quality of livelihood will be ensued. In conclusion, while the air pollution seems to be a significant concern affecting the physique of metropolitan cities’ residents, there should be an adequate scrutiny in the type of fuel that the citizens use for mobility. These fuels must be tested in all ramifications to ensure that no threat is posed to the environment through its usage.
In this era, there has been a steady decline in the quality of life for inhabitants of metropolitan cities. While this essay will discuss air
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pollution
as one of the multifarious factors attributed to the poor living conditions in major towns, it will
also
proffer the usage of bio-degradable
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fuels
as a possible solution to this issue.

Air
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pollution
can be
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seen
as an inevitable chaos which is
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often
associated with
heavily
populated areas. This
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pollution
,
however
, can be products of exhaust from vehicles. Take
for instance
, the bubbling city of Lagos, Nigeria, more than an average of the workers there resort to private means of transportation.
As a result
, a fleet of cars
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are
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often
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seen
on the roads, and these cars, nonetheless, release an immense amount of CO2 in the atmosphere, which
drastically
affects the health of the inhabitants.

Furthermore
, this ugly trend is not
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left
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untackled
, as the
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use
of
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ecofriendly
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fuels
and gases can be one of the ways to avert this atmospheric
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pollution
. The
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governments
should ensure that the
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end
products of the
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fuels
which its citizens consume are environmental friendly. When these are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
, several health-related sicknesses can be
drastically
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reduced
, and
thus
, a healthier quality of livelihood will
be ensued
.

In conclusion
, while the air
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
seems to be a significant concern affecting the physique of metropolitan cities’ residents, there should be an adequate scrutiny in the type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
that the citizens
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
for mobility. These
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fuels
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tested
in all ramifications to ensure that no threat
is posed
to the environment through its usage.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay TODAY, THE QUALITY OF LIFE IN LARGE CITIES IS DECREASING. DISCUSS THE CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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