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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v.58

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 58
In recent year’s it has been noticed that tourists are getting more interested in visiting unexplored places such as the Sahara desert and the Antarctic. It cannot be denied that these extreme places do come with several difficulties for these tourists, but on the other hand these locations do also provide a source of experiencing an unmatchable beauty to them. Tourists from all across the world visit these locations which offer multitude of picturesque views, biodiversity and wildlife which they will remember for their lifetime. For an instance, watching a polar bear in the Antarctic in its natural habitat is truly a moment which every tourists would love to experience. Tourists at these extreme locations experience solitude which is not possible to get at a destination which is very common among tourist which are too chaotic. With several benefits, these locations do have their own limits and disadvantages as well. For an example, locations such as the Antarctic and the Sahara desert could have severly low level of oxygen, snow storm, sand storm, limited food supplies, lack of network coverage, isolation and negligible medical facilities. At times tourists may suffer sever frost bites which may cause threat to life. Before planning their journey to these difficult places tourists are recommended to get their medical examination done. On the total, these beautiful places like the Sahara desert and the Antarctic do come with harsh conditions for the tourists, but they tend to focus on what is beyond these difficulties. With proper planning and calculated risk, the journey of these tourists to these extreme places would truly be the most beautiful experience of their life.
In recent year’s it has
been noticed
that
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tourists
are getting more interested in visiting unexplored
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places
such as the Sahara desert and the
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Antarctic
. It cannot
be denied
that these extreme
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places
do
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come
with several difficulties for these
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tourists
,
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but
on the other hand
these
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locations
do
also
provide a source of experiencing an unmatchable beauty to them.

Tourists from all across the world visit these
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locations
which offer multitude of picturesque views, biodiversity and wildlife which they will remember for their lifetime. For an instance, watching a polar bear in the
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Antarctic
in its natural habitat is
truly
a moment which every
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tourists
would
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love
to experience.
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Tourists
at these extreme
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locations
experience solitude which is not possible to
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get
at a destination which is
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very
common among
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tourist
which are too chaotic.

With several benefits, these
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locations
do have their
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own
limits and disadvantages
as well
. For an example,
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locations
such as the
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Antarctic
and the Sahara desert could have
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severly
low level of oxygen, snow storm, sand storm, limited food supplies, lack of network coverage, isolation and negligible medical facilities. At times
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tourists
may suffer sever frost bites which may cause threat to life.
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Before
planning their journey to these difficult
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places
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tourists
are recommended
to
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get
their medical examination done.

On the total, these
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beautiful
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places
like the Sahara desert and the
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Antarctic
do
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come
with harsh conditions for the
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tourists
,
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but
they tend to focus on what is beyond these difficulties. With proper planning and calculated
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risk
, the journey of these
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tourists
to these extreme
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places
would
truly
be the most
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beautiful
experience of their life.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 58

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
5.5
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