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To growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays people are adopting new ways of shopping i. e ecommerce. The reach of online shopping is spreading so fast that one day it will outrun our offline shopping experince. And i totally agree with this statement. Two arguments on agree and one of disagree are explained below along with the conclusion. Price of the product plays an important role. Multiple manufacturers are collaborating with ecommerce sites, so that they can sell directly to customers and the consumers are getting products at competitive price. I recently bought something from an ecommerce site and the price difference between hyperlocal market and the online market was nearly a quater. So i purchased it from online website. The truth is bitter but everyone is shifting towards digital way of purchasing. Moreeover, easy home deliveries and returns are also great factors which plays an important role in dramatically increase in ecommerce trend. In this eary of busy schedules, peopledon't have much time to go for shopping and spend hours. They have multiple choices available online. From which they can order anything and after receiving the product even if they don't like it, they can return. However buying offline is time consuming and returning them will literally take similar time. On the other side, most of the people still prefer to buy from shops, as the customers are impatient. They just want the product immidiately ans also in some products like clothes and shoes, where there is size difference. Customers wants to try and feel the product, their size and also the comfort. This impatience behaviour of people still shows that the offline shops are never shutting down. It can be concluded that in most cases people love to spend online but also they prefer to purchase offline some of the products The reasons for the same are pricing and better services, which they are getting online might lead to most the shops closing but not every shop. With the habit of consumer buying online, the shop owners are also shifting towards online market. The same offline seller is now selling online and the balance between online shopping and local shops is still going smoothly.
Nowadays
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people
are adopting new ways of
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shopping
i. e
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ecommerce
. The reach of
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online
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shopping
is spreading
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so
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fast
that one day it will outrun our offline
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shopping
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experince
. And
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i
totally
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agree
with this statement. Two arguments on
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agree
and one of disagree are
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explained
below along with the conclusion.

Price of the
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product
plays an
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important
role. Multiple manufacturers are collaborating with
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ecommerce
sites,
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so
that they can sell
directly
to customers and the consumers are getting
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products
at competitive price. I recently
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bought
something from an
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ecommerce
site and the price difference between
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hyperlocal
market and the
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online
market was
nearly
a
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quater
.
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So
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i
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purchased
it from
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online
website. The truth is bitter
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but
everyone is shifting towards digital way of purchasing.

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Moreeover
, easy home deliveries and returns are
also
great factors which plays an
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important
role in
dramatically
increase in
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ecommerce
trend. In this
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eary
of busy schedules,
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peopledon
't have much time to go for
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shopping
and spend hours. They have multiple choices available
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online
. From which they can order anything and after receiving the
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product
even if they don't like it, they can return.
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However
buying offline is
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time consuming
and returning them will
literally
take similar time.

On the other side, most of the
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people
still
prefer to
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buy
from
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shops
, as the customers are impatient. They
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just
want the
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product
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immidiately
ans
also
in
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some
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products
like clothes and shoes, where there is size difference.
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Customers wants
to
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try and
feel the
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product
, their size and
also
the comfort. This impatience
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behaviour
of
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people
still
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shows
that the offline
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shops
are never shutting down.

It can
be concluded
that
in most cases
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people
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love
to spend
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online
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but
also
they prefer to
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purchase
offline
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some of the
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products
The reasons for the same are pricing and better services, which they are getting
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online
might lead to most the
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shops
closing
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but
not every
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shop
. With the habit of consumer buying
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online
, the
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shop
owners are
also
shifting towards
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online
market. The same offline seller is
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now
selling
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online
and the balance between
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online
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shopping
and local
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shops
is
still
going
smoothly
.
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IELTS essay To growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
360 words
5.5
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