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These are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others thinks having a range of subject is better for a children’s future. Discuss both side and give your opinion

These are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others thinks having a range of subject is better for a children’s future. Discuss both side and give your opinion 1NVX
On the one hand, there are some educational pioneers believe that book knowledge is not sufficient for careers, schools must add further curriculum activities for children like a small project, science fair, and many more. This kind of activities can create opportunities for children when they are working on it. For Instance, if a school organized a science fair activities of various small projects, then children will learn how to create something new which is not in books what they studies in class.
On the one hand, there are
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educational pioneers believe that book knowledge is not sufficient for careers, schools
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further
curriculum activities for children like a
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project, science
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fair
, and
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more. This kind of activities can create opportunities for children when they are working on it.
For Instance
, if a school organized a science
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fair
activities of various
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small
projects, then children will learn how to create something new which is not in books what they
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studies
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IELTS essay These are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others thinks having a range of subject is better for a children’s future. Discuss both side and give your opinion

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