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The world today uses more renewable energy than ever before since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and is economically sound

The world today uses more renewable energy than ever before since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and is economically sound aE66V
The world today uses more renewable energy than ever before since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and is economically sound; however, some argue that green energy could undermine the reliability of the global supply as a result of its dependency on climatic and meteorological phenomena. This essay will examine both views, but personally, I strongly advocate the adoption of renewable sources of energy. On the one hand, opponents of renewables claim that the world could face disruptions to the power supply should they be fully adopted. This is largely due to the fact that many green energy technologies currently in use depend on changeable and unpredictable phenomena such as wind, rain and cloud cover. To take the fastest growing sector as an example, solar panels can only be used in the presence of strong and direct sunlight, and although the problem of directness has already been somewhat solved with moving panel arrays, a cloudy few days could still result in a blackout if we depended entirely on solar power; something that is unlikely to occur today given current oil stockpiles. However, fossil fuels are a larger threat to energy security since they are certainly finite in quantity, whereas renewable energy is effectively infinite; once the Earth’s oil is depleted, there will be no energy security without green energy technologies. Furthermore, problems of unpredictability can be mitigated by improving battery technologies (to create a larger buffer), building more renewable energy generators (to increase supply during ideal conditions) and improving current technologies (to increase efficiency), such as in the moving solar panel example. Proponents of renewables therefore claim that they are the most economically sound option. To conclude, while many may believe that green energy technologies are a threat to energy security, the fossil fuels they frequently promote are a greater threat, and renewables are in fact the only sound option, both economically and environmentally. Vocabulary
The world
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today
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uses
more
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renewable
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energy
than ever
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before
since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and is
economically
sound;
however
,
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some
argue that
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green
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energy
could undermine the reliability of the global supply
as a result
of its dependency on climatic and meteorological phenomena. This essay will examine both views,
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but
personally
, I
strongly
advocate the adoption of
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renewable
sources of energy.

On the one hand, opponents of
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renewables
claim that the world could face disruptions to the power supply should they be
fully
adopted. This is
largely
due to the fact that
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many
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green
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energy
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technologies
currently
in
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use
depend on changeable and unpredictable phenomena such as wind, rain and cloud cover.

To take the fastest growing sector as an example, solar panels can
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only
be
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used
in the presence of strong and direct sunlight, and although the problem of directness has already been somewhat solved with moving panel arrays, a cloudy few days could
still
result in a blackout if we depended
entirely
on solar power; something
that is
unlikely to occur
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today
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given
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current
oil stockpiles.

However
, fossil fuels are a larger threat to
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energy
security since they are
certainly
finite in quantity, whereas
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renewable
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energy
is
effectively
infinite; once the Earth’s oil
is depleted
, there will be no
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energy
security without
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green
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energy
technologies.

Furthermore
, problems of unpredictability can
be mitigated
by improving battery
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technologies
(to create a larger buffer), building more
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renewable
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energy
generators (to increase supply during ideal conditions) and improving
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current
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technologies
(to increase efficiency), such as in the moving solar panel example. Proponents of
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renewables
therefore
claim that they are the most
economically
sound option.

To conclude
, while
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many may
believe that
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green
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energy
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technologies
are a threat to
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energy
security, the fossil fuels they
frequently
promote are a greater threat, and
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renewables
are in fact the
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only
sound option, both
economically
and
environmentally
.

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IELTS essay The world today uses more renewable energy than ever before since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and is economically sound

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  American English
7 paragraphs
316 words
6.0
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