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The topic is introduce yourself

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My name is Dan. I'm 19 years old. Now I am an second year student. I study at Qui Nhon Unniversity, I'm in English pedagogy. My hometown is in Tay Son District, Binh Dinh Province. I live in a village with my family. There are four people in my family: my parent, my younger sister and me. My father is a teacher, he teaches in secondary school. My mother is a doctor, she works in a hospital of Tay Son District. My younger sister is also a student, she is sixteen years old, she is in grade 11, she studies at Quang Trung high school. I'm an introvert people so i have a pretty rich inner life. I like Kpop music, I'm a fan of Kpop. So I often listen to music in my free time or when I feel down. Music help me to get inspiration. Morever I like to do sport. I often do exercise in every morning to enhance my body.
My name is Dan. I'm 19 years
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Qui
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Nhon
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in my family: my parent, my younger sister and me. My father is a teacher, he teaches in secondary school. My mother is a doctor, she works in a hospital of
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Son District.
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, she is in grade 11, she studies at
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Quang
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high school. I'm an introvert
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people
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have a pretty rich inner life. I like
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Kpop
music, I'm a fan of
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Kpop
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listen to music in my free time or when I feel down. Music
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inspiration.
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IELTS essay The topic is introduce yourself

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
164 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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