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The rule in your family for your friend visit your house

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Firstly, respecting privacy rights is the most essential rule in my family. For example, before entering someone’s room you should knock the door and do not touch anything things without permission. It will create a comfortable atmosphere for each member in the family. The second important rule in my family is going to bed before 10p. m. My parents are always busy with teaching everyday so they cannot sleep enough, consequently they frequently have headaches. It is the reason why all the members need to go to bed early like that. Therefore, our health can improve and it also helps our work become more effective. The third rule is keeping our room tidy before the end of the day. I was taught to arrange every single thing in my life since I was a child. It helps me become more disciplined and forms a good lifestyle. Keeping my room tidy can also create a comfortable space for me to study energetically and sleep soundly. Last but not least, there’s always a get-together day at home at weekend. This is the time to sit down and share joys, sadness and difficulties or express your own opinions. It’s the most joyful moment of the week, when I can let go of the pressure and get closer to my family. I think you will have a great time here.
Firstly
, respecting privacy rights is the most essential
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rule
in my family.
For example
,
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before
entering someone’s room you should knock the door and do not touch anything things without permission. It will create a comfortable atmosphere for each member in the family.

The second
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important
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rule
in my family is going to bed
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before
10p. m. My parents are always busy with teaching everyday
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so
they cannot sleep
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enough
,
consequently
they
frequently
have headaches. It is the reason why all the members need to go to bed early like that.
Therefore
, our health can
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improve
and it
also
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helps
our work become more effective.

The third
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rule
is keeping our room tidy
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before
the
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end
of the day. I
was taught
to arrange every single thing in my life since I was a child. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
me become more disciplined and forms a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
lifestyle. Keeping my room tidy can
also
create a comfortable space for me to study
energetically
and sleep
soundly
.

Last
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but
not least, there’s always a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
-together day at home at weekend. This is the time to sit down and share joys, sadness and difficulties or express your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
opinions. It’s the most joyful moment of the week, when I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
go of the pressure and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
closer to my family. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
you will have a great time here.
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IELTS essay The rule in your family for your friend visit your house

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
226 words
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