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the risks nature is facing because of human's activities

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The life of all of us is characterized by a hectic pace, always looking for something to do and never really pausing our thoughts to think about what surrounds us. I guess that is the cause why most of the people act disinterested in how the world is changing around us, mostly because it is common to think that it doesn’t directly affect our life, which is a common misbelief. From the very ancient times, men have always needed nature to survive. Starting from the essential activities such as eating, building a shelter to live in, lighting a fire to keep warm… As the time went on, men started expanding their knowledge and with the industrial revolution they started seeing nature just as a mean to exploit to become richer, forgetting its real importance. I hope that today almost everyone is aware of the fact that our environment, our world is in real danger and there’s the need to actively do something to preserve it. One of the most important goal of the 2030 Agenda is the 15th goal: Life on the land. This goal aims to sustainably manage forests, combat desertification, halt and reverse land degradation, halt biodiversity loss. All these goals aim to restore nature to its original form since human activity has altered almost 75 per cent of the earth’s surface, squeezing wildlife and nature into an ever-smaller corner of the planet. Our planet is constantly trying to warn us that we are harshly damaging it, just thinking about species extinctions or about the covid 19 outbreak. In fact, in 2016 the United Nations Environment Programme pointed out that 75 per cent of all emerging infectious diseases in humans are zoonotic and that these zoonotic diseases are closely interlinked with the health of ecosystems. I believe each of us should make a thoughtful effort to just take from nature what we need to survive and nothing else more. As Ghandi said, we wouldn’t have to face all these catastrophes if men would just take what he truly needs and not always looking for more, because of his greediness. An example of that could be seen in our country. It is called ‘Overshoot day’ the day when umanity's resource consumption for the year exceeds earth’s capacity to regenerate those resources that year. This year we have exceeded this limit on the 13th of May, which means that we have taken too much from our planet compared to what we really needed to take. In conclusion, I am strongly convinced there is the urge that everyone decides to activley fight for the planet because we need to preserve the life of our Earth. I hope by 2030 the 15th agenda’s goal will be achieved as well as the awerness of this problem will be completely reached by any individual.
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of all of us
is characterized
by a hectic pace, always looking for something to do and never
really
pausing our thoughts to
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think
about what surrounds us. I guess
that is
the cause why most of the
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people
act disinterested in how the world is changing around us,
mostly
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because
it is common to
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think
that it doesn’t
directly
affect our
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life
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misbelief
.

From the
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very
ancient times,
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men
have always needed
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nature
to survive. Starting from the essential activities such as eating, building a shelter to
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live
in, lighting a fire to
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keep
warm… As the time went on,
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men
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started
expanding their knowledge and with the industrial revolution they
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started
seeing
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nature
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as a mean to exploit to become richer, forgetting its real importance. I hope that
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today
almost everyone is aware of the fact that our environment, our world is in real
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danger
and there’s the
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need
to
actively
do something to preserve it.

One of the most
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important
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goal
of the 2030 Agenda is the 15th
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goal
:
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Life
on the land. This
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goal
aims to
sustainably
manage forests, combat desertification, halt and reverse land degradation, halt biodiversity loss. All these
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goals
aim to restore
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nature
to its original form since human activity has altered almost 75 per cent of the earth’s surface, squeezing wildlife and
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nature
into an ever-smaller corner of the
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planet
. Our
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planet
is
constantly
trying to warn us that we are
harshly
damaging it,
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just
thinking about species extinctions or about the
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covid 19
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outbreak
. In fact, in 2016 the United Nations Environment
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Programme
pointed out that 75 per cent of all emerging infectious diseases in humans are zoonotic and that these zoonotic diseases are
closely
interlinked with the health of ecosystems.

I believe each of us should
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make
a thoughtful effort to
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just
take from
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nature
what we
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need
to survive and nothing else more. As
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Ghandi
said, we wouldn’t
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have to
face all these catastrophes if
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men
would
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just
take what he
truly
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needs
and not always looking for more,
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because
of his greediness. An example of that could be
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seen
in our country. It
is called
‘Overshoot day’ the day when
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umanity
's resource consumption for the year exceeds earth’s capacity to regenerate those resources that year. This year we have exceeded this limit on the 13th of May, which means that we have taken too much from our
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planet
compared to what we
really
needed to take.

In conclusion
, I am
strongly
convinced there is the urge that everyone decides to
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activley
fight for the
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planet
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because
we
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need
to preserve the
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life
of our Earth. I hope by 2030 the 15th agenda’s
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will
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as well
as the
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awerness
of this problem will be completely reached by any individual.
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IELTS essay the risks nature is facing because of human's activities

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