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The reading passage and lecture have a conflicting opinions about wether or not Peary reached the north pole. The article strongly postulates that there some doubts from hisorians about the Peary trip, but there is three discussions supports that Peary w

The reading passage and lecture have a conflicting opinions about wether or not Peary reached the north pole. The article strongly postulates that there some doubts from hisorians about the Peary trip, but there is three discussions supports that Peary w RNnPM
The lecturer disputes the accuracy of information about Peary's journey to the North Pole. He asserts that there is no conclusive evidence to support that Peary did reach the North Pole. First, the lecturer argues that the decision declared by National Geographic investigation committee does not provide evidence that Peary did reach the North Pole. According to the lecturer the committee members who took the decision were close friends of Peary and some of them funded his trip to the North Pole. Therefore, it possible that the committee member were not telling the truth. Second, the lecturer argues that the trip of Avery is different than Peary trip to support his arrival at the North pole in 37 days. . He contends that Peary traveled in harsher whether conditions. Moreover, he carried more weight on the sled than Avery did. Therefore, it is possible that he was not able to reach that far in such short period of time. Finally, the lecturer argues that Peary used a primitive camera with unclear pictures to support his presence at the North pole while taking them. . The author claims that the shadow and the sun position supports the argument that those pictures were taken at the North Pole. However, the lecturer contends, that the shadows in the photographs are not clear and accordingly the position of the sun is not accurate. Moreover, the pictures were very old. As a result, the pictures were fade and blurred. Thus they might have been taken somewhere else than the North Pole
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disputes the accuracy of information about Peary's journey to the
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. He asserts that there is no conclusive evidence to
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support
that Peary did reach the
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Pole.

First
, the
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argues that the decision declared by National Geographic investigation committee does not provide evidence that Peary did reach the
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North
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Pole
. According to the
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the committee members who took the decision were close friends of Peary and
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of them funded his trip to the
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North
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Pole
.
Therefore
,
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it
possible that the committee member were not telling the truth.

Second, the
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argues that the trip of Avery is
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than
Peary trip to
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support
his arrival at the
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in 37 days.
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.
He contends that Peary traveled in harsher whether conditions.
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, he carried more weight on the sled than Avery did.
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, it is possible that he was not able to reach that far in such short period of time.

Finally
, the
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argues that Peary
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a primitive camera with unclear
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to
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his presence at the
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while taking them.
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.
The author claims that the shadow and the sun position
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supports
the argument that those
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pictures
were taken
at the
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North
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Pole
.
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, the
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contends, that the shadows in the photographs are not
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and
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the position of the sun is not accurate.
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, the
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were
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.
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, the
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pictures
were
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and blurred.
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somewhere
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than the
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IELTS essay The reading passage and lecture have a conflicting opinions about wether or not Peary reached the north pole. The article strongly postulates that there some doubts from hisorians about the Peary trip, but there is three discussions supports that Peary w

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255 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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