Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The reading claims that the communal online encyclopedias have several important problems that make them much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias.

The reading claims that the communal online encyclopedias have several important problems that make them much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias. 6xklW
The reading claims that the communal online encyclopedias have several important problems that make them much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias. However, the professor states that the communal online encyclopedias are never perfect, but the critism in the reading ignored the importance of them. She refutes each of the author's problems. First, the article avers that contributors to a communal online encyclopedia often lack academic credentials, thereby making their contributions partially informed at best and downright inaccurate in many cases. On the other hand, the speaker opposes this point by saying that the traditional encyclopedias are not perfect and if we look to the comprehensive of them, we will find errors. In fact, she mentions that it is easy to correct the online encyclopedia but the printed one, the errors will remain for decades. Second, the passage posits that the communal nature of these online encyclopedias gives unscrupulous users and hackers the opportunity to fabricate, delete, and corrupt information in the encyclopedia. In contrast, the lecturer counters this point by stating that there are strategies to protect them and nobody will be able to delete of fabricate them. Actually, she argues that there is a format that no one can make change and it is reliable. In addition, a special editor who looks to the changes and he could remove the change. Third, the article asserts that the communal encyclopedias focus too frequently, and in too great a depth, on trivial and popular topics, which creates a false impression of what is important and what is not. Conversely, the professor casts doubt on this point by explaining that the problem in the traditional encyclopedias are they have limitation in the space of what is important or not. She argues that there is a judgement team that make decision about that, and the space is not an issue. besides, there is a great variety in online encyclopedias that reflect the diversity and this offers a strong advantage of using online encyclopedias.
The reading claims that the communal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
encyclopedias have several
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
problems that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias.
However
, the professor states that the communal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
encyclopedias are never perfect,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the
Possible spelling mistake found.
critism
in the reading
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
the importance of them. She refutes each of the author's problems.

First
, the article avers that contributors to a communal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
encyclopedia
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
lack academic credentials, thereby making their contributions
partially
informed at best and downright inaccurate in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
cases.
On the other hand
, the speaker opposes this point by saying that the traditional encyclopedias are not perfect and if we look to the comprehensive of them, we will find errors. In fact, she mentions that it is easy to correct the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
encyclopedia
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the printed one, the errors will remain for decades.

Second, the passage posits that the communal nature of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
encyclopedias gives unscrupulous users and hackers the opportunity to fabricate, delete, and corrupt information in the encyclopedia.
In contrast
, the lecturer counters this point by stating that there are strategies to protect them and nobody will be able to delete of fabricate them. Actually, she argues that there is a format that no one can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
and it is reliable.
In addition
, a special editor who looks to the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
changes and
he could remove the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
.

Third, the article asserts that the communal encyclopedias focus too
frequently
, and in too great a depth, on trivial and popular topics, which creates a false impression of what is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
and what is not.
Conversely
, the professor casts doubt on this point by explaining that the problem in the traditional encyclopedias are they have limitation in the space of what is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
or not. She argues that there is a judgement team that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
decision about that, and the space is not an issue.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
besides
, there is a great variety in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
encyclopedias that reflect the diversity and this offers a strong advantage of using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
encyclopedias.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay The reading claims that the communal online encyclopedias have several important problems that make them much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The reading claims that the communal online encyclopedias have several important problems that make them much less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias.