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The reading claims that private collectors have been selling and buying fossils and this is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public.

The reading claims that private collectors have been selling and buying fossils and this is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public. 850xV
The reading claims that private collectors have been selling and buying fossils and this is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public. It provides three reasons of support. However, the professor states that there are some negative consequences but the benefits of the private collectors are more than the disdvantages and she refutes each of the author's reasons. First, the article avers that the public suffers because fossils that would otherwise be donated to museums where everyone can see them are sold to private collectors who don't allow the public to view their collection. In contrast, the speaker opposes this point by stating that the public has a great opportunity to see the fossils because of the collectors. These collectors pruchase a lot of fossils, as a result, they would display them for public such as schools and museums. Second, the passage asserts that scientists are likely to lose access to some of the important fossils and thereby miss out on potentially crucial discoveries about extinct life form. On the other hand, the professor counters this point by saying that this point is not realistic. In fact, before they put the value to sell the fossils, scientists identify the fossils by performing tests and investigations. Actually, if the fossils has any information, it should be done by experts and scientists community, so the scientists are not going to miss the important information in the fossils. Third, the passage posits that commercial fossil collectors often destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth. Conversely, the professor casts doubt on this point by explaining that there is no damage for the fossils because this would lead to discovery for many other fossils. Frankly, the process of collecting the fossils run by an university or other facilities and a lot of other fossils would be discovered by the collectors which help the scientists to get information from the fossils.
The reading claims that private collectors have been selling and buying
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fossils
and this is an unfortunate development for both
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scientists
and the general
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public
. It provides three reasons of support.
However
, the professor states that there are
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some
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negative
consequences
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but
the benefits of the private collectors are more than the
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disdvantages and
she refutes each of the author's reasons.

First
, the article avers that the
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public
suffers
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because
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fossils
that would
otherwise
be donated
to museums where everyone can
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see
them
are sold
to private collectors who don't
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allow
the
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public
to view their collection.
In contrast
, the speaker opposes this
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point
by stating that the
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public
has a great opportunity to
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see
the
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fossils
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because
of the collectors. These collectors
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pruchase
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a lot of
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fossils
,
as a result
, they would display them for
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public
such as schools and museums.

Second, the passage asserts that
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scientists
are likely to lose access to
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some of the
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important
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fossils
and thereby miss out on
potentially
crucial discoveries about extinct life form. On the
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other
hand, the professor counters this
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point
by saying that this
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point
is not realistic. In fact,
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before
they put the value to sell the
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fossils
,
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scientists
identify the
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fossils
by performing
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tests
and investigations. Actually, if the
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fossils
has any information, it should
be done
by experts and
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scientists
community,
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so
the
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scientists
are not going to miss the
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important
information in the fossils.

Third, the passage posits that commercial
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fossil
collectors
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often
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destroy
valuable scientific evidence associated with the
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fossils
they unearth.
Conversely
, the professor casts doubt on this
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point
by explaining that there is no damage for the
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fossils
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because
this would lead to discovery for
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many
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other
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fossils
.
Frankly
, the process of collecting the
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fossils
run by
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an
university or
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other
facilities and
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a lot of
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other
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fossils
would
be discovered
by the collectors which
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help
the
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scientists
to
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get
information from the
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fossils
.
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IELTS essay The reading claims that private collectors have been selling and buying fossils and this is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
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