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The reading claims that it is not likely that the vessels, which are clay jar contained a copper cylinder surrounding an iron rode, were actually used as electric batteries in ancient times.

The reading claims that it is not likely that the vessels, which are clay jar contained a copper cylinder surrounding an iron rode, were actually used as electric batteries in ancient times. NrWrb
The reading claims that it is not likely that the vessels, which are clay jar contained a copper cylinder surrounding an iron rode, were actually used as electric batteries in ancient times. It provides three reasons of support. In contrast, the professor states that the arguments in the passage are not convincing and the explanation that these vessels were used as batteries is correct. She refutes each of the author's reasons. First, the article avers that if the vessels were used as batteries, they would probably have been attached to some electricity conductors such as metal wires but there were not any metal wires near the vessels. However, the professor opposes this point by saying that the vessels were discovered by local people and they may find another materials near the vessels but they couldn't recognize them. In fact, She mentions that these materials may serve as conductores but they were thrown away. Second, the passage asserts that the copper cylinders inside the jars look exactly like copper cylinders discovered in the ruins of Seleucia and they were used them for holding scrolls of sacred texts so the vessels could be used as the same purpose. On the other hand, the speaker counters this point by stating that this does not approve that the vessels were used as holders. Actually, she argues that the copper originated for that purpose but then the people adapted to use the copper to generate electricity. Third, the article posits that what could ancient people have done with the electricity that the vessels were supposed to have generated? because they had no devices to use it. Conversely, the lecturer casts doubt on this point by explaining that the batteries shock was generated when somebody touch it and this is invisible power that people used it as magic. In addition, she affirms that they might use this electricity for healing as today because it stimulates muscles to relieve pain, and anceint people may use batteries for the same purpose.
The reading claims that it is not likely that the
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vessels
, which are clay jar contained a copper cylinder surrounding an iron rode, were actually
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used
as electric batteries in ancient times. It provides three reasons of support.
In contrast
, the professor states that the arguments in the passage are not convincing and the explanation that these
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vessels
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as batteries is correct. She refutes each of the author's reasons.

First
, the article avers that if the
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vessels
were
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used
as batteries, they would
probably
have
been attached
to
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some
electricity conductors such as metal wires
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but
there were not any metal wires near the
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vessels
.
However
, the professor opposes this point by saying that the
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vessels
were discovered
by local
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people and
they may find another materials near the
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vessels
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but
they couldn't recognize them. In fact, She mentions that these materials may serve as conductores
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they
were thrown
away.

Second, the passage asserts that the copper cylinders inside the jars look exactly like copper cylinders discovered in the ruins of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Seleucia and
they were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
them for holding scrolls of sacred texts
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so
the
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vessels
could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as the same purpose.
On the other hand
, the speaker counters this point by stating that this does not approve that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vessels
were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as holders. Actually, she argues that the copper originated for that purpose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
then the
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people
adapted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the copper to generate electricity.

Third, the article posits that what could ancient
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people
have done with the electricity that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vessels
were supposed
to have generated?
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because
they had no devices to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it.
Conversely
, the lecturer casts doubt on this point by explaining that the batteries shock
was generated
when somebody touch it and this is invisible power that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
it as magic.
In addition
, she affirms that they might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this electricity for healing as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it stimulates muscles to relieve pain, and
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anceint
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people
may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
batteries for the same purpose.

IELTS essay The reading claims that it is not likely that the vessels, which are clay jar contained a copper cylinder surrounding an iron rode, were actually used as electric batteries in ancient times.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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