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The reading and lecture both discusses the group-think, While the reading focus on its advantages but the lecture casts its implications by pointing out the several disadvantages.

The reading and lecture both discusses the group-think, While the reading focus on its advantages but the lecture casts its implications by pointing out the several disadvantages. 2bx8X
The reading and lecture both discusses the group-think, While the reading focus on its advantages but the lecture casts its implications by pointing out the several disadvantages. First of all, the author suggests that the people can arrive superior decisions in a group which they cannot do so if they are doing same job individually. The lecturer, however, argues that one member can dominate the group and confirm his decision solely. He also focuses that each individual trying to confirms each other on their own decision and there may be some kind of disagreements between the members. He states that if somebody made objections on group decisions, there is the chance of rejection. Secondly, the writer contends that employee takes more responsibility and there is also exchange of diverse knowledge when they work in group. The lecturer, on the other hand, rebuts this by mentioning that the employee are vulnerable of decisions. He mentions that, when they performs the duty independently, the lack of confidence might invite the bad consequences, He elaborates this point by providing the escaped prisoner. At last, the the reading avers that when people worked in group, each individual encouraged other and everybody benefited. The lecturer however, challenges this by providing that the example that how the ford motor company have bankrupted when they are depend on the group decisions. He states that ford motor company have been bankrupted because of marketing disaster caused by the group decision making.
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the lecture casts its implications by pointing out the several disadvantages.

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people
can arrive superior
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decisions
in a
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group
which they cannot do
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so
if they are doing same job
individually
. The lecturer,
however
, argues that one member can dominate the
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group
and confirm his
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decision
solely
. He
also
focuses that each individual trying to
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confirms
each other on their
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own
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decision
and there may be
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some
kind of disagreements between the members. He states that if somebody made objections on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
, there is the chance of rejection.

Secondly
, the writer contends that employee takes more responsibility and there is
also
exchange of diverse knowledge when they work in
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group
. The lecturer,
on the other hand
, rebuts this by mentioning that the employee are vulnerable of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
. He mentions that, when they
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performs
the duty
independently
, the lack of confidence might invite the
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bad
consequences, He elaborates this point by providing the escaped prisoner.

At last,
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the the
reading avers that when
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people
worked in
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group
, each individual encouraged other and everybody benefited. The lecturer
however
, challenges this by providing that the example that how the ford motor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
have bankrupted when they are
Consider using a past participle here: "depended".
depend
on the
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group
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
. He states that ford motor
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company
have
been bankrupted
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because
of marketing disaster caused by the
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group
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decision making
.
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IELTS essay The reading and lecture both discusses the group-think, While the reading focus on its advantages but the lecture casts its implications by pointing out the several disadvantages.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
243 words
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