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the process about milk products

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The process describes the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. There are a total of 7 steps. Overall, it is a man-made, linear process consisting of four main stages, farming, crushing, separating and drying. Canes must be growing for 12 to 18 months before production. After it has fully grown, The harvest can be plucked in two different ways, from the machine either using manpower. Farmers use the manual method, removing the leaves first and then chopping the stalks, whereas the mechanized method uses machines to cut the bars directly. Cane bars have been crushed by the crushing motor and turning into juice. The next step is purifying the liquid using a limestone filter and then convert to syrup by the evaporator. The mixture is then poured into a centrifuge and spun at high speed to separate the sugar crystals. Finally, the crystals are dried and cooled, yielding sugar.
The process
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describes
the manufacturing process for making
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sugar
from
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sugar
cane. There are a total of 7 steps.
Overall
, it is a
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man
-made, linear process consisting of four main stages, farming, crushing, separating and drying.

Canes
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must
be growing for 12 to 18 months
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before
production. After it has
fully
grown, The harvest can
be plucked
in two
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different
ways, from the machine either using manpower. Farmers
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use
the manual method, removing the
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leaves
first
and then chopping the stalks, whereas the mechanized method
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uses
machines to
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cut
the bars
directly
. Cane bars have
been crushed
by the crushing motor and turning into juice. The
next
step is purifying the liquid using a limestone filter and then convert to syrup by the evaporator. The mixture is then poured into a centrifuge and spun at high speed to separate the
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sugar
crystals.
Finally
, the crystals
are dried
and cooled, yielding
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sugar
.

IELTS essay the process about milk products

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
151 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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