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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today Vp6Q
The diagrammatical plans shows the about the grange park present and how it was, when opened in 1920. These plans give an exact detail about the renovations and how the park has been developed for the modern era. Grange park has two entrances from Arnold avenue and one from Eldon street. Everything in the park has changed including the seating. Despite that, the park had an fountain when entered, which is now made into a rose garden. Many developments have been achieved, the stage for musicians is now been upgraded to an Amphitheatre for live concerts and most importantly a Cafe has been brought in for people’s refreshment The only place in the park still remains same is the rose garden on the right when entered from the right of the Arnold avenue. A children play area has took the place of pond, which drives children to visit the park everyday. Also there is an underground car park built for people to park their car hassle free. A elegant glasshouse was situated in the place of newly built water feature.
The
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diagrammatical
plans
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shows
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the about the
grange
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park
present and how it was, when opened in 1920. These plans give an exact detail about the renovations and how the
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park
has
been developed
for the modern era.

Grange
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park
has two entrances from Arnold avenue and one from Eldon street. Everything in the
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park
has
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changed
including the seating. Despite that, the
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park
had
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an
fountain when entered, which is
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now
made into a rose garden.
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Many
developments have
been achieved
, the stage for musicians is
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now
been upgraded
to an
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Amphitheatre
for
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live
concerts and most
importantly
a
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Cafe
has
been brought
in for
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people
’s refreshment

The
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only
place in the
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park
still
remains same is the rose garden on the right when entered from the right of the Arnold avenue. A children play area has
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took
the place of pond, which drives children to visit the
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park
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everyday
.
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Also
there is an underground car
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park
built for
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people
to
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park
their car hassle free.
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A
elegant glasshouse
was situated
in the place of
newly
built water feature.
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IELTS essay The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
180 words
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