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the pictures show how ketchup is made

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The illustration demonstrates the process by which tomato ketchup is made. There are 15 steps in the process, from picking and putting tomatoes in basket to eating with hamburger and fries. The first step is that tomatoes are picked and are put into basket and they are sorted into good and bad tomatoes. Once they have been sorted, they are then sent to factory. Next stalk, seeds and skin are removed from tomatoes. After that they are put into container in order to crush. Once tomatoes have been crushed, sugar, vinegar and salt are then added to give extra flavor. Then they are boiled together. Having left in the container for two hours after boiling, bottles are poured with ketchup. The following step is that the bottles of ketchup are labelled and then the quality of ketchup is controlled. Having been checked the bottles are packed into boxes in order to deliver supermarkets by lorry. The final step is that you can eat ketchup with hamburger and fries.
The illustration demonstrates the process by which tomato
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ketchup
is made
. There are 15
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steps
in the process, from picking and putting tomatoes in basket to eating with hamburger and fries.

The
first
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step
is that tomatoes
are picked
and
are put
into
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basket and
they
are sorted
into
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good
and
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bad
tomatoes. Once they have
been sorted
, they are then
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sent
to factory.
Next
stalk, seeds and skin
are removed
from tomatoes.
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After
that they
are put
into container in order to crush. Once tomatoes have
been crushed
, sugar, vinegar and salt are then
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added
to give extra flavor. Then they
are boiled
together. Having
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left
in the container for two hours after boiling, bottles
are poured
with ketchup.

The following
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step
is that the bottles of
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ketchup
are labelled
and then the quality of
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ketchup
is controlled
. Having been
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checked
the bottles
are packed
into boxes in order to deliver supermarkets by lorry. The final
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step
is that you can eat
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ketchup
with hamburger and fries.
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IELTS essay the pictures show how ketchup is made

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
168 words
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