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The picture shows the manufacture of science Park in the past and present time

The picture shows the manufacture of science Park in the past and present time xPkeo
The cited mapchart depicts the information about the infrastructure of Science park in the past and present. Overall, it is clearly demonstrated that there are many facilities which are changed, while some facilities remained the same in the science Park. Having a bird's eye it is evident that in 2008, to the north west side of the Science Park, there was a grassland but at present grassland area is demolished and research and development is erected in the past. in addition to this, offices reception was near by the woodland in 2008. , whereas nowadays reception is demolished and University hub is introduced furthermore, in the heart of the Science Park there was a car park which is a reduced in today's time. Behind the car park there was grasslands and woodland however in these days cycle path is established. Moving further, in 2008, across from the IT Centre there was cyber security and in today's time innovation centre and cybersecurity development. additionally, South side of the Science Park there was railway station in which is stable in these days and paths are converted into cycle password land is to also remained stable
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depicts the information about the infrastructure of
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Science
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park
in the past and present.
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, it is
clearly
demonstrated that there are
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many
facilities which are
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changed
, while
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some
facilities remained the same in the
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science
Park.

Having a bird's eye it is evident that in 2008, to the
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north west
side of the
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Science
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Park
, there was a grassland
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but
at present grassland area
is demolished
and research and development
is erected
in the past.
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in
addition to this, offices reception was
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near by
the woodland in 2008.
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,
whereas nowadays reception
is demolished
and University hub
is introduced
furthermore
, in the heart of the
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Science
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Park
there was a car
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park
which is a
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reduced
in
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today
's time. Behind the car
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park
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there was grasslands
and woodland
however
in these days cycle path
is established
.

Moving
further
, in 2008, across from the IT
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Centre
there was cyber security and in
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today
's time innovation
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centre
and cybersecurity development.
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additionally
, South side of the
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Science
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Park
there was railway station in which is stable in these days and paths
are converted
into cycle password land is to
also
remained stable
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IELTS essay The picture shows the manufacture of science Park in the past and present time

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