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The passage and lecture are arguing about the function of the carved stone balls.

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The passage and lecture are arguing about the function of the carved stone balls. The author lists out three possible theories to explain this matter. On the contrary, the lecturer believes that all these theories are unconvincing and she challenges proposed theories one by one. First, the passage author mentions that, these stone objects were used for fighting and hunting. In contrast, the lecturer refuses this point and she states that the other weapons like arrows had sing for hunting while there is no sign on these stones. Therefore, these objects were not used as weapons. Second, the passage states another theory; these stone objects were used for system of weight. The lecturer, however, holds an opposing view and she asserts that these stone objects were not proper for using system of weight, since they are made of different stones. In better words, although these stone objects are the same shape, they have different weight since they are made of different stone with different densities. Therefore, these the same shaped stones were not the same weight which is improtant for system of weight. Finally, based on the passage, these stone objects had had a social purpose. On the other hand, the lecturer rebuts this theory and she points out the disigns of these stones were too simple for using as social marked. Furthermore, there was a custom that, when a person died her/his social mark was buried with her/him, while none of these object have been found in tomb or graves. Hence, these object were not uses as social marks.
The
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passage
and lecture are arguing about the function of the carved
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stone
balls. The author lists out three possible
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theories
to
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explain
this matter.
On the contrary
, the
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lecturer
believes that all these
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theories
are
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unconvincing and
she challenges proposed
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theories
one by one.

First
, the
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passage
author mentions that, these
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stone
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objects
were
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used
for fighting and hunting.
In contrast
, the
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lecturer
refuses this
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point and
she states that the other weapons like arrows had
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sing
for hunting while there is no
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sign
on these
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stones
.
Therefore
, these
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objects
were not
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used
as weapons.

Second, the
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passage
states another
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theory
; these
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stone
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objects
were
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used
for system of
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weight
. The
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lecturer
,
however
, holds an opposing
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view and
she asserts that these
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stone
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objects
were not proper for using system of
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weight
, since they
are made
of
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different
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stones
. In better words, although these
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stone
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objects
are the same shape, they have
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different
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weight
since they
are made
of
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different
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stone
with
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different
densities.
Therefore
, these the same shaped
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stones
were not the same
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weight
which is
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improtant
for system of weight.

Finally
, based on the
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passage
, these
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stone
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objects
had had a
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social
purpose.
On the other hand
, the
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lecturer
rebuts this
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theory and
she points out the
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disigns
of these
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stones
were too simple for using as
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social
marked.
Furthermore
, there was a custom that, when a person
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died
her/his
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social
mark
was buried
with her/him, while none of these
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object
have
been found
in tomb or graves.
Hence
, these
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object
were not
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uses
as
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social
marks.
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IELTS essay The passage and lecture are arguing about the function of the carved stone balls.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
5.5
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