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The number of tv program is growing. Some people say that it is good as it gives people more choices, while other say it affect the qualities of program. Discuss both and give your opinion.

It is fact that there are numerous TV shows to entertain the audience. Some individuals opine that multiple option gives them to choose any of them as per their preferences, whereas others believe that it affects the quality of TV programs. This essay intends to look into both perspectives. I am personally in the favor of first view. There are many reasons why some people are happy with the increasing number of TV serials. Firstly, they have a lot of choices to being an entertain such as serials, comedy shows, and that. They sometimes getting bored with the same program and the advertisement. Therefore, they choose to watch multiple shows at a same time. Secondly, when there are various shows, then plethora of actors get income from that and they can us these platforms to show their talent in front of public. For example, India's got talent is a platforms for talented person where they can depict their flair to public as well as employer who seek for the particular abilities. On the other hand, those who against the too many TV shows argue that many programs are same in the concept. There is no any uniqueness in the program and that is just the waste of the resources and money. To exemplify, there are many dancing shows which needs different platform for dancer. However, the theme is the same. So, there should limited shows for the individual domain. I believe that manifold shows gives more advantages than the limited shows. Many people getting earn by the many platform. Sometimes many talented person left for the limited entry, so they can choose other options when other programs available for presenting their talent. In conclusion, multiple programs helps audiences as well as actors or genius.
It is fact that there are numerous TV
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shows
to entertain the audience.
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Some
individuals opine that multiple option gives them to choose any of them as per their preferences, whereas others believe that it affects the quality of TV
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programs
. This essay intends to look into both perspectives. I am
personally
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first
view.

There are
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reasons why
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some
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people
are happy with the increasing number of TV serials.
Firstly
, they have
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a lot of
choices to being
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an entertain
such as serials, comedy
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, and that. They
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sometimes
getting bored with the same
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program
and the advertisement.
Therefore
, they choose to
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watch
multiple
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shows
at a same time.
Secondly
, when there are various
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shows
, then plethora of actors
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get
income from
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that and
they can us these
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platforms
to
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show
their talent in front of public.
For example
, India's
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got
talent is a
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platforms
for talented person where they can depict their flair to public
as well
as employer who seek for the particular abilities.

On the
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other
hand, those who against the too
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many
TV
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shows
argue that
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many
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programs
are same in the concept. There is
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no
any uniqueness in the
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program
and
that is
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the waste of the resources and money. To exemplify, there are
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many
dancing
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shows
which needs
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different
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platform
for dancer.
However
, the theme is the same.
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So
, there should
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limited
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shows
for the individual domain.

I believe that manifold
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shows
gives more advantages than the limited
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shows
.
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Many
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people
getting earn by the
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many
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platform
.
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Sometimes
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many talented person
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left
for the limited entry,
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so
they can choose
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other
options when
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other
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programs
available for presenting their talent.

In conclusion
, multiple
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programs
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helps
audiences
as well
as actors or genius.
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IELTS essay The number of tv program is growing. Some people say that it is good as it gives people more choices, while other say it affect the qualities of program.

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