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The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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High income is one of the factors that contributes to people when they pick any career or jobs. While the high finical gain could be a consideration when people pursue any jobs, is it unlikely that the working environment still can be the top priority when people looking for a job. This essay will discuss why job satisfaction would be the primacy than high income. When individuals seek employment, the high financial profit could be a factor in the equation. Promotion and raise is the affirmation from our superior. Therefore, this encourage them to keep working on their professional filed. As their income accumulates more, their satisfaction for life will be more high. For example, the American workplace happiness index show 69% of worker pay more than $15000 per year reported being satisfied, only 40% of people make under $15000 said is the same. Is it likely that when people are searching for a career, the workplace culture may still be a primary concern. Working environment are associated with employee engagement, happiness and productively and affect how employees interact with others. So, as the company has a better workplace condition, the employees would happy about stay in the firm as their long term goal. To sum up, plenty of the influences that people consider when deciding a profession or occupation is their earnings. However, since a heavy cash reward might be a variable to weigh when working in an industry, it is unlikely that the workplace climate will be the utmost priority when looking for work. Ultimately, working environment still would be the main dimension to searching for a job.
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income is one of the factors that contributes to
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people
when they pick any career or
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jobs
. While the
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high
finical gain could be a consideration when
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people
pursue any
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jobs
, is it unlikely that the
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working
environment
still
can be the top priority when
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people
looking for a
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job
. This essay will discuss why
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job
satisfaction would be the primacy than
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high
income.

When individuals seek employment, the
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high
financial profit could be a factor in the equation. Promotion and raise is the affirmation from our superior.
Therefore
,
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this encourage
them to
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keep
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working
on their professional filed. As their income accumulates more, their satisfaction for life will be more
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high
.
For example
, the American
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workplace
happiness index
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show
69% of worker pay more than $15000 per year reported
being satisfied
,
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only
40% of
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people
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under $15000 said is the same.

Is it likely that when
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people
are searching for a career, the
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workplace
culture may
still
be a primary concern.
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Working
environment
are associated
with employee engagement, happiness and
productively
and affect how employees interact with others.
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So
, as the
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company
has a better
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workplace
condition, the employees would happy about stay in the firm as their long term goal.

To sum up,
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plenty
of the influences that
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people
consider when deciding a profession or occupation is their earnings.
However
, since a heavy cash reward might be a variable to weigh when
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working
in an industry, it is unlikely that the
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workplace
climate will be the utmost priority when looking for work.
Ultimately
,
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working
environment
still
would be the main dimension to searching for a
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job
.
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IELTS essay The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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